Really good. Sad.

i really liked this--I liked the "language" of the nomalies

Asome story! I loved it was form someone elas POV then max, logen, or Zach very
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Awesome story, Jane. I love The Krit/Syl dialogue. Hilarious! I can totally see Krit saying stuff like that. You did a great job balancing humour with drama. You did good.

It was a good story but it was confusing. I kind of lost you toward the end...

Quite interesting. I'm glad that they got Max back!!!!

Very disturbing and very powerful. Your story aptly shows just how thin the line between sanity and insanity can be.

Oh, Jane, I don't know what to say. This story's just too wonderfully angsty for words. . . . <Thinks> I loved the banter between Krit and Syl, and that sandwich (it sounds good, actually--though I'm the girl who ate sour cream-and-garlic cole slaw for breakfast). The humor of the story both relieves and emphasizes the angst, and it served you very well. And there, now I've said something analytical, so I can go and not feel guilty now. It's a great story, and I'm looking forward to whatever you write next. :)

Good but post more soon!!!!