Any chance of finishing this story? I hate getting into a good story to find it is incomplete. Please do more!

Also Lornes first name is Evan. I'm sure you probably know that by now, they never really mentioned it at the beginning of the Atlantis series.

Great story!

I really hope you haven't given up on this story...I'm hooked

Thinking there is more to that inner voice thing- had an inkling that there may be more in the first chapter but now i think there might be...
Anyway. Keep going. Eager to see where this goes! But for now- off to bed as its very very very late(as you may be able to tell by how jumbled this review is- but i am too tired to fix it )Hope you update this soon as it -potential!(sp)

Brillent start. John as Rodney's inner voice is really funny.
One tiny nitpick: Lorne's first name is actually Marcus/Marc- but it doesn't harm the story at all
Brillent start!

Oh no! Teyla and ROdney 'life partners', trapped, no rescue(yet) and ulterior motives...eagerly awaiting more.

oh...really good chapter! very exciting and loving all the interaction between teyla and rodney!! what does the matriach want with them??! i bet she has some evil plan up her sleeves! How does she know about their 'traits'...ooh excellent plot!

Poor Rodney and Teyla!

Life partner hehe well I guess we know what John is now ;) That Matriarc was pretty cryptic when she talked about the life partner thing hehe

Oh, an unauthorized rescue! Go John! :D I'm loving this! More please!

You know I'm loving this. Especially love Rodneys inner Sheppard. Hurry up and write more!

Oh, excellent start! :) Poor Teyla and Rodney :( More please!

oh poor teyla and rodney!! I love stories with those two stuck together...come on John and Co. it is time to do some saving!

You are off to a good start. You seem to have the characters down, and your exposition is good. However there are several errors in spelling and verb usage that are distracting.
Look forward to more of this fic.
Thanks for sharing.