keep going this is intersting

Whoo hoo...go Gabe go Gabe... *dances* Nice very nice. Now why hadn't I seen this bit of a story before?

this is looking good. keep it up

This gets better with every chapter, please continue with it soon!

I love the dedication to Erin. Thats pretty nice.

I havent talked to you FOREVER. But youre not on so I'll talk to you through this. Ill probably be online every waking moment like I used to be because I am back from vacation and I'm incredibly bored and I'm not coming home on the 20th.

But the story's great...i still think you should get rid of Kelly though. I'm about ready too right now.

Ok talk to ya later BYEEEE

Hmm, sorry to those of you that read the last little peice of that last chapter. That was a little dumb on my part no to notive it, and I hope to eventually encorperate it into this incredibly long story. sorry 'bout that, hope you all like the next few chapters.

Ummm I think some of the story is missing...i might be wrong though. It is good what I have read so far though.

This is getting interesting, please get the next chapter up soon!

Jareth saying blimey? Okay... Lol! Please continue soon!

Um...ahem...I don't mean to sound ill mannered, but I found in rather disconcerting (and I apologixe for my atrocious spelling) that one fo your characters was named Melissa (or Lissa). Don't spread this around, but that's my name/nickname...it's weird to read about a character named the same (and let's not even get into the whole *daddy had me commited for my odd behavior...brushing just a little close to the truth, there. The story itself shows great promise, but I'm a little confused - you aren't getting into who Gabriel is and why Jareth cares about his half-mortal child. Although the Godzilla reference sounded poetntially fun. I can't wait to see where this one goes...I'll overlook the slightly unnerving name similarity.

Loving it so far...the Godzilla reference is very cute! I wondered how you'd fit that one in!

this story would be better if there was even a story to it. it's not even enough to be a cliff hanger which alot of people don't like. try making a story longer before you put one up here.

please finish. i like what you got so far.

Random. lets write a porno.

Wow! I really like this story. I'ts really strange to see a different "brother" story. Keep it up, yo!