Lovely, like reading E. E. Cummings.

ACK that's just so pretty and horribly creepy and I want to run away and hug it at the same time!

(...why can't we do heart icons on *heart*

I love how you wrote it. Maybe you could try correcting some of the grammatical errors, though, unless they were meant to be that way. I know most of my mistakes are on purpose, but I wasn't quite sure about yours. :) Good job though! It's beautiful. :D