Hm, it was a good little drabble, but even so it should be somewhat more better established then this. This reminds me of a rough draft that needed to be revised before it would come to perfection. I mean, it's pretty good, but there are things in it that made me flinch, preferribly Kirt's aftershave. Where did he get aftershave? From the homes? Doesn't the aftershave get pretty...mucky...after a few years? Also, Kir's jacket. I don't remember the children having jackets, not in the cult at least. Even the names were hard for me to get into my mind. They were unique, but I don't think they were biblical, and they sound slightly alike that it was hard for me to tell who was who. Anyway, besides that, it was good, but it needed more work, and more feeling to Kir for me to understand the position of a sacrificed.

Snuffie

This was my favorite part of any of the movies, and you really did a good job writing from Kir's point of view.

Hey,
This story was really good. Hope to see more from you later .

Great! I'm so lonely being the only one in this category... this was wonderful! Keep writing and keep reading "Suffer the Children"!