i take it back, THIS was my favourite chapter. a truly well written lemon scene! always a joy. there was only hinting at attraction for all the preceeding chapters, but when the moment came it didnt feel sudden or forced despite lack of tangible build up. the foreplay was beautifully and realistically done and though the actual sex was not descibed in detail it didnt feel like anything was missing. the emotions and sensations of the act itself were conveyed in snippets of sentences masterfully during and after that part of the scene, and came of as being very tastefully written. it was also funny and emotive, often simultaneously. all this points to you having serious crazy mad skills!

i liked the end chapter. Raito's final interaction Ryuk were fitting, and while i have never seen or read Yami no Matsuei, now i might. endless cases seems like both a fitting punishment and reward for the two of them.

my favourite chapter so far. good work on using the question game and cold temperature to quickly increase the level of intamacy.

Ryuks interlude and secret plot were enjoyable

still liking rhe fic, but it could do with some betaing. the random switches from past to present tense break the flow.

L also being a Shinigami is an original take on this concept. he is oddly forgiving, but hes L so i guess hes meant to be odd. he always cared more about winning than actually getting rid of Raito anyway. i liked that he turned donwn heaven due to probable ennui. Raitos death and subsequently becoming a Shinigami, along with everything that means, could conceivably break him of his Kira related mania, but there should have been more detail on the mental process that lead to that change. the overall concept of the fic is interesting.

Just wanted to give you some feedback love. I really enjoyed this story!

Really liked it.

WOW.

Silly L. You'd think after reading all that L/Light yaoi (we know he does!) that he'd know the blow-job always comes first!

...-bursts out laughing-

Anyways, you wrote a great story. I was quite into it, and it was nice to get away from all the angst that usually plagues DN fanfics. It is... different to not have the main characters trying to bone/kill each other with equal fever. I liked the differences for the most part, but it took... adjusting. =)
Also I feel like I should mention there were a couple of typos in this little ficlet. Not enough to really take away from the story, but enough to notice.
Well.. actually only two come to mind. I just have a sharp eye.

Either way, thank you for sharing such a wonderful fic with everyone. I think it's quite worth faving, and after I do that I shall promptly drop by your page and see if you have any other fictions that catch my eye.

Ahahaha, this is quite an amazing fanfic! The Obligatory Sex Epilogue was brilliant, and although I'm not a fan of the LxLight pairing, you kept their emotions amazing and their personalities real. You deserve excellent marks for this story. Just...the entire concept, the plot, and how everything worked itself out...it's brilliant. You've done what many authors fail to do.

best Death Note fanfic EVAH! (evah=ever)

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L is so damn cute either raito
it's a amazing fic you write
I have pleasure to read it, thanks
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Yay! Death Note and Yami no Matsuei cross-over!

I love the whole story, but this made me especially happy ^^

♥ ... 'nuff said.