I thought these were good. The relationship between Felicity and Simon really interested me when I read the books, and I thought these fit.

Wonderfully done!

I like this! It is both written and well and very much in character. The only this is that the chapters are a little short and since I'm impatient, I was a little disappointed that there wasn't more, because I like what is happening and want to find out more. :)
I'm also a little confused when this is taking place in--as in, after all the three books, or in between Rebel Angels and The Sweet Far Thing, or even before A Great and Terrible Beauty?
Other than that, I really love this. =)

nice chapter. i liked how fee tore her dress. made the situation all the better, don't really know why though. keep it up!

blue-eyed claudia

Yes, yes, YES! She was in character perfectly! ^_^ I don't know HOW I didn't get an e-mail, telling that this had been updated, but I know now. NEwayz, this chapter was very well done, and the way you've captured Fee's feelings is EXTREMELY well done. I too believe that Felicity would never actually be all gaa-gaa over Simon, just because of their two completely different personalities.

But, you have done justice to the two. I'm pleased! ^_^ Also, there were TWO things that stood out in error:

1) The sentence: “And why not?” Questions Simon, his eyebrows arched."
- It should be: "And why not?" questions Simon, his eyebrows arched." (Note: Don't capitalize the "Q" in questions. I'm guilty of doing that SAME exact thing, so I guess we're in that little boat together! ^_^)

2) The other sentence: “Because I’m not so easily impressed. I understand that your too obstinate and arrogant..."
- It should be: "Because I'm not so easily impressed. I understand that you're too obstinate and arrogant..." (Note: "your" is supposed to be "you're". It's an easy mistake to make, so I understand perfectly as to why you got that wrong. Also, that whole "their, they're, there" thing is usually used wrong too. So, yeah, just be sure to look out for those minor little things, and you'll be in good shape.)

Well, that's all I have to say. The update was fantastic, but be sure to check from gramatical errors. Other than that, though, YOU ARE PURE GENIUS!

Please hurry with chapter 4! Your style is TRULY amazing! ^_^

Luv,
♥~Princess.Jack.N.Anamaria~♥
a.k.a
*~Gotta ♥ Sparramaria~*

P.S. There is a possiblity that I MAY be creating a sequel to "A Great and Terrible Beauty", but that won't be coming for quite some time. It's only because I've entered a writing fair at my school and the entries are due by Feb. 24, so I have to keep ALL of my focus on that. I'll be sure to jump right back into "AGaTB" as soon as I'm done with my writing fair fic! Wish me luck. ^_^

Bye!

I didn't find that out-of-character at all! That was really good...I'm liking your writing and these installments so much. You really capture their characters well and in a different light than most do. Keep up the amazing work!

I liked seeing one from Fee. it was nice to see what she thought of Simon and his "wooing" of her. :)

Another criticism about dialogue formatting: you shouldn't capitalize the first letter of the word that comes after the quote.

“And why not?” Questions Simon, his eyebrows arched.

It should be: “And why not?” questions Simon, his eyebrows arched.

And remember to have commas instead of periods before the "Simon comments" or whatever. That's what you did in the first sentence. It's just kind of a pet peeve of mine, that's why I'm being so picky. :)

I really liked seeing Felicity's side of things. It was very good, once again!

Hello again!

I HOPE THE UPDATE COMES QUICKLY! ^_^ This was actually quite good, and like I've said, quite unique.

One thing, though: "upwerd" is supposed to be spelled "upward". JUST A LITTLE SPELLING ERROR!

Oh, and this line:
- "On the contrary I don't think you're submissive at all, but even the strongest of girls can find herself intrigued by a charming gentlemen like myself."

--should be written as:--
- "On the contrary, (note: comma) I don't think you're submissive at all, but even the strongest of girls can find herself intrigued by a charming gentleman (note: A instead of E in the "man" part of "gentleman") like myself."

*Well, actually, that comma after contrary doesn't HAVE to be there, so...disregard that.*

Other than the VERY few typos, it was a fantastic update. MORE SOON!

Luv 4evermore,
*~Gotta ♥ Sparramaria~*

Hey there! I've decided that, since you've reviewed something of mine, I'll go ahead and return the favor! ^_^ lol

Anyways, this was a really unique idea to go with. I don't think I would have EVER imagined Fee and Simon together! What an interesting idea! And, might I add, it's VERY well done!

Cya in the next chapter...which will be in a few minutes, or seconds, depending on whenever the review reaches your inbox.

Luv 4ever,
*~Gotta ♥ Sparramaria~*

The only mistakes I saw was how you formatted your dialogue.

"Why look, it's Miss Felicity Worthington." I say cheerily, walking up alongside Felicity and her chaperone.

Instead of having a full stop, with the period there, you should have a comma, or a pause. It

"Why look, it's Miss Felicity Worthington," I say cheerily, walking up alongside Felicity and her chaperone.

There were only a couple of those, because you didn't use the "I say" or whatever very much.

But this chapter was good. You have such a knack for keeping everyone in character! *is jealous* I'm so glad you updated!

prongs

Finally! I've been waiting /forever/! No, really, I have.

I only see a few mistakes--mostly grammar ones. But I'm not feeling picky today so I'm not going to harp on it.

Anyway, I really like your writing style, and this piece seems fantastic so far! Keep up the great work!

I like your prose, it's simple and descriptive without being too flowery. It's a little odd standing on its own, but it looks like you'll be updating anyways.

Oh, and one thing that stood out was "ammo". It doesn't really fit with the flow of the rest of the piece, and it's a bit of an anachronism. :p

I want more! MORE!

Thats pretty good, write another chapter!

Oh lovely, Felicity/Simon! Very nice. I like the way you used present tense in this. Simon did seem a little too dark a character; I always saw him as a typical teenage male who wanted a good time, but each to their own interpretation.

'The girl has a pinch of demon in her as well'. I love that line, by the way. Pure Felicity.