|Reviews for The Fate of A Wizard|
| Curtis 6/2/08 . chapter 13
I was very surprised wit this Story. I enjoyed it a lot and cannot wait until the sequel comes out.
| Lisa 6/1/08 . chapter 13
You have some interesting ideas that are quite original. The problem, however, is that I felt that I was reading a story written in dot point. None of your ideas were fully developed or explored. There was such a sense of being rushed and that too much that would have made this story fantastic was just neglected.
What you should have done was fully explore the implications and effects of each element you added to the story. For example, the abilities/knowledge given to Harry by Exar Kunn was a fantastic twist to the story. Sadly, I still don't really know what the prophecy really meant or what the ancient Sith Lord imparted to Harry. Nor did you really get into what that knowledge meant to and for Harry. I doubt that he could absorb Sith knowledge without being affected on some level.
Then there is the whole development of Harry as a Jedi using the ancient Code. This was so rushed that it was unbelievable. Do you really think the Jedi Council would accept him with open arms so easily? Particularly when he more or less spat on the beliefs they have spent their lives upholding? Ah, no. The ease with which Harry developed his Jedi abilities was also unrealistic. It would have been far better for Harry to spend time struggling and learning to master a philosophy and set of abilities far removed from the magic he is familiar with. Again, this is all symptomatic of rushing the story.
Even in Super!Harry stories or in AUs, it is essential that an author does his or her best to explore the ideas they present in a logical and believable manner. As it has been said before, it is the journey that matters, not the destination.
| AegnorFellFire 5/31/08 . chapter 13
Very interesting. The writing was very good, probably because you spent so much more time on it (since you've been working on it all along). I especially liked the scene with Anakin and Palpatine, at least in my opinion it provides a more convincing explanation for Anakin turning to the Dark Side. Even while admitting to being evil as Anakin has been taught to see it he still works very hard to give of the appearance of good. In many ways this is what evil does, even while proclaiming itself for what it is, it still denies that it is truly evil (after all, the bad guys don't see themselves as evil). I am anxious to find out the ramifications of Harry's choice, and the potential role of Death in the story. Though one thing that I think is weak (or perhaps simply requires greater explanation), is how that gas whatever it was brought about Harry being given this choice. I am looking forward to the sequel.
| murdrax 5/31/08 . chapter 13
ohh that was very clever of death to trick harry like that lol!
| Zan 5/31/08 . chapter 5
oh, this is totally pissing me off. Your story idea is good, but...
STOP SAYING "SUPPOSED" AND "SO-CALLED"!
you really do use the two words excessively. Its quite off-putting. its damn well like reading this damn sentence that damn well repeats that damnable word "damn" every damn chance it damn well gets... DAMN!
see- its really irritating! just... dont use it any more! its unnecessary! XD hahaha!
thats pretty much my only (damn) criticism of the story.
have a good day
| murdrax 5/28/08 . chapter 12
neat chapter here take this baseball bat and beat that block into submission :-P
| Robo Raver 5/27/08 . chapter 1
someone turn on a fan
cause this story is HOT. :]
umm. yeah its soo interesting
i'm loving every moment of it!
so glad you decided to add another update!
| AegnorFellFire 5/27/08 . chapter 12
An interesting take on Obi-Wan's view of Palpatine. I always got the impression that Obi-Wan never trusted politicians, and in a way suspected Palpatine of being up to no good the entire time. Even without Harry, I am interested to see what happens there, this section shows improvement in writing and is definitely a good thing overall. Finally, just in case you haven't found one yet, the best Star Wars time-line I've found is on wookieepedia, at starwars./wiki/Timeline. Keep writing.
| Viridian 12/4/07 . chapter 1
Forgot to mention this. Interesting opening. So Harry wasn't killed, was he? "You no longer are needed on Earth. That is way I am sending you to a galaxy far, far away…" sounds just way too cold though ... it's like, good job getting rid of Voldemort, now go get this next guy ... Poor Harry. I'm surprised to see how well he takes it though.
| Viridian 12/4/07 . chapter 3
Beautiful chapter! I loved how perfect the "Old Code" sounded when you juxtaposed it against the first one offered. So little changed in terms of the words themselves, but it offers a whole different world of meaning.
| CRose 11/7/07 . chapter 4
You're moving the story along to fast. You aren't taking the time to give us enough detail. Do you realize you haven't even taken time to really describe what people are wearing? In Star Wars weird clothes are the norm. The lack of detail is making this hard to read. And I find it hard to believe that Harry would become Yoda's student, met a girl, and build his light saber all in the course of a few days.
| trogdor 11/4/07 . chapter 10
liking the story, was expecting harry to be involved more in revenge of the sith more, but *shrugs* i'm not writing the story.
also the begening of the story seemed more like it was a summary of a story, but its doing a lot better now, keep on improving
| Liedral 9/27/07 . chapter 4
Problem: - Harry's a Padawan isn't he? Therefore he must have a master, and no matter how old or independant he is, I cannot see the Jedi Masters allowing a padawan to run amock to other planets without supervision. Especially a new Padawan who'd have arrived in the manner Harry did.
| Twin Tails Speed 9/27/07 . chapter 10
This is a excellent chapter update that was well worth waiting for even if it is a bit short.
| kirallie 4/24/07 . chapter 9
How come the time on earth is so erratic? SO VOldemort is using Remus' body? Ouch, goo dway to make Harry more than a little mad. Do the jedi know of Harry's learning from Exar Kun? His dream is a vision isn't it? Hope he can keep it from coming true! Keep up the good work!