Just a few grammatical things:

1. "His pain was heavy and surrounded him like a blanket - his features strong and firm, but his eyes hidden beneath his wide brimmed hat."

2. Also, make sure your usage of "no one" is uniform - it doesn't have a dash.

3. "dying," not "dieing"

Anyway, excellent description - I envy you. It made me very sad, and, although the plot isn't clarified, I think your work summarizes everything Watch is.

cool i wonder where this is going..u should really update

Aww, this was so sad, but I love it. Watch is my favorite Spooksville character, and I think the emotion, thoughts, and characteristics that you've given him are perfect. Also, I love all the details and descriptions that you've put into this.

My only criticism is that there are some minor spelling and grammar flaws ("no one new" should be 'no one knew', "the dieing light" should be 'the dying light", stuff like that.)

Anyway, great job on a very creative, descriptive fic. It has a mysterious, vague tone to it that I think is perfect for Watch. Nice job, and I'd like to see you write some more Spooksville fics.