Update this story and I'll give you a cookie.

Okay, sorry to hear about Sam, and the alien problem, but you will finish this one, right? Please say you will.

I'm hooked. (I have got to stop reading these incomplete fics!) LOL

Thanks for sharing.

Please update, you left us with an evil cliffhanger.

This story has p[otential and I would urge you to keep going!

Oh please write the rest!! i'm on the edge of my seat.

:D this is awsome! update soon!

great start, can't wait to see what you do next, don't leave us hanging for too long!

Really enjoying the start, I always felt this episode could do with a tap or alt. ending...loving it so far! =) Bad Rodney for giving John the Luscius drug! =/

Ohh, I like this! John needs so badly to be control that I can totally see him reacted to loss of control this way.

More? Please? With a cherry on top?

oops... poor McKay...

This could be an interesting idea but as it is at present it needs a lot of work on the grammar. You are switching tenses between past and present tense and there are lots of little mistakes here and there which are quite distracting to the reader. Plotwise, I'm not sure whether what you describe (John fighting the effects of the drug)is possible given that we saw in the episode that even people who were aware of the drug and its effects (i.e. Rodney) were helpless to resist its effects once exposed. My other concern is that, given the height of the balconies we have thus far seen on the show (and the fact that, as the living quarters etc are in the central core of the city, they overlook the rest of the city as opposed to open water), a jump such as you describe would likely have been fatal. It's an interesting story idea but I think it is in need of a bit more work.

you've got me interested. let the plot bunny run and see where this takes us.

What do I think? Write more, Write faster... please definitely continue this!