Ah, another happy ending….WAFF…Lord Saturn gives a happy sigh of approval.

Once again I will implore you to use a new line when a another character speaks. It gets confusing trying to keep track who is saying what. A proofreader can help you with that.

I noticed that one of your reviewers from the first story complained that you’re not using enough paragraphs. I end up doing the same thing with one or two sentence paragraphs but in terms of readability it’s the lesser of two evils. Nothing makes me hit the back button faster then huge blocks of text. I use any excuse I can think of to break it up to make it easier to read by people like me with bad eyes.

You handled the intimacy very tastefully. I had no problem envisioning what happened or what was about to happen. It is always a pleasure to read something romantic from a woman’s perspective.

Well I’ve babbled enough. I think I’ll work on something that you will enjoy reading.

Dale (AKA 94saturn)

So waffy I love it! ^^

very good i loved it
awesome ending

very good, very good, i loved the prequel to this story too, write more!

Aw KAWAII!