nice story...but is this spcl sum1 itsuki? i don't really like gay relationships...but still...update

This is like an Alternate Universe fic, isn't it?

Otherwise I'd like to see how you justify the fact that people of very different ages and different areas of the prefecture (and Kyoko's not even from Gunma, she's from Saitama) all go to the SAME high school together.

Also, everyone is acting so out of their characters that no one seems to be him or herself.

Remember too that not everybody here is fluent in Japanese so you may want to use a little less of the language if you don't want to confuse your readers.

I'm sorry if this sounds harsh, trust me, I'm never this negative when I review but you're going to need to work on your fanfiction a lot if you want it to make sense.

Oh man... Everyone's so OOC... Hime-sama? Giggling? Takumi, Itsuki, Keisuke, and Mako hanging out? No, no... I really don't expect much from fanfics, but I expect that at least they have something else other than conversations.

And, no offence, but it really sounds like it was made by a kid...

uhh well.. its a cool story pero parang familiar na familiar yung mga happenings sa story sa akin ah.. parang?

Hi there, nice start. No OOC yet. _