O.M.G. there is some hints of lemony-ness but i dont care I LOVE IT! you write the CUTEST stuff! OM'GOSH it so ADORABLE! the hug scene is the BEST! i wish it had actualy happened! but noo theres like no romance till the carnival scene *pouts* ah well...but do you agree with me that it sucks that they killed Rosette and Chrono? i do!

Nice one.

It's well written, and you put in quite a lot of descriptions which I'm generally fond of. I must admit that I actually find the episode in question quite cheesy, mainly because I consider it a somewhat inadequate attempt to incorporate romance betwen Chrno and Rosette.

That being said I like this take on the episode, since it does bring a bit more depth to something I consider to be relatively shallow. One thing in particular I'd like to point out in your fic is the dream part where you take them back to Seventh Bell - behaving like kids but appearing like grown-ups. The Seventh Bell part of the anime appeals a lot to me since it was a time of healing and learning for Chrno, and I think he was happier than ever simply because he could be so carefree. To be able to act like a child while still looking like an adult (and having Rosette look adult too ;)) really seems like a desirable dream for him, and it is just the cruel irony of fate that he's forced into the opposite.

If there's one thing I would critisize a bit, it's that you sometime get a bit heavy in some of your descriptions, and that you state things I already know. If I hadn't seen the anime I would probably appreciate some of the descriptions more, but since I have seen it those descriptions have a tendency to become a bit redundant and take momentum out of your writing. The main reason for pointing this out is that I feel that I'm constantly struggling with it myself :)

Overall, a nice one-shot.

Shnoosh.

Very cute and sweet!

I think I should be watching this anime! Wow. It never ceases to amaze me how well you can write..the way you work the words and emotions to fully express what it is you wish to say. You are such a wordsmith! And Chrono sounds so sweet, and yet tough, as well - the kind of guy (or fallen angel, in this case) that any woman would be lucky to have.

Great one-shot. Are you planning to do more stories here?

This story makes me want to watch the anime! I think the 1st person was a good choice and I very much enjoyed the approach. At first, Chrono seemed a little confused (the fever perhaps, but it seemed like it mirrored his growing attraction to Rossette) and then his thoughts morphed into admiration. I adored the slow transformation of his inner musings. The admiration turned to sweet infactuation and love and then to sexual desire - a very nice and convincing progression. Maybe I'm reading too much into it, but the memory of him sucking her wounded finger (what a hot scene, too!) made me envision red on white (you described her as angelic, albeit fiery), which not only seemed to reflect her character, but his growing feelings for her. The relationship seems so pure, yet it's changing. Basically, the fluff was not only convincing, but powerful.

This story portrays the beauty of one-shots - the fact that it gives the author the ability to showcase her literary talent. Obviously a multi-chapter story can permit that as well, but due to the length and overall involvement in the story, the reader oftentimes misses the subtle genius an author incorporates into it. I've never watched this anime, yet I could see these characters and feel their love and attachment - beautiful imagery. The symbolism of red and white had a profound impact in furthering the emotion within the reader and the 1st person POV only added more fuel to this sentimental fire. I wish I had a man that loved me like that!

I'm a sucker for tactful fluff and so I thank you for writing this little piece (and directing me toward it - I never got an email notice). You most definitely know when to cut a scene, which is a wonderful thing indeed, and you have a knack for molding it to perfection. I realize that I'm growing as a writer, and subsequently, I'm growing as a reader as well. This story just reminded me that I need to take a few extra moments to digest a story and truly appreciate its ingenuity.

Aw...
So sweet!
I like it...
I'll send it to my brother who's terribly crazy about them!

You have the most wonderful gift; to take a story and turn it into something much more inviting and beautiful to read about. My first 'look-see' into Chrono Crusade and it was a journey worth taking. I loved the use of descriptives in this story, allowing me to visualize the characters without ever having seen them. Chrono and Rosette seem made for each other through your eyes. For a freshman entry into a new anime category, this was captivating. Excellent as always my friend!

Oh! Fluff and stuff with a touch of grown up Chrono...yummy! I really liked this. I had a coupled of grammer issues, things like 'me' instead of 'I' but other than that, it was good. ^-^