Hehehe, working on another story eh?

:P I know I have heaps of stories I have that I have stopped and then started within spans of... a few months, maybe more than that... not sure.

You're writing style is quite good. There are a few things you can improve (I'm being quite hypocritical here) but you learn in time... I guess.

Continue all your stories (but if you do then I'll have to force myself to continue as well)

The Teddy Master is pleased...for noe

No don't abort! I read it in one go and I thought it's real intruiging. I've actually been reading a lot of your works. Missing Time is one of the best Kaka/Rin stories I've read so far around second only to Love is Remontant, but anyway don't abort and please try your hand in another one of 'em Kaka/Rin stories please? There aren't really enough fics about those two.

pulls out an ak 47... you are so dead... if you dont continue it...

All fanfics are AU.
and doesn't allow author note posts like this anymore.

Aw! it would be so sad if you delete it!! It can be a really good AU. But you are the author and I have no right to tell you what to do :D Anyway, I loved this story really much, so I'll wait for your next story. Please take care. :D

There's no reason to delete it, you can leave it up for others to re-read later.

Though, I would like to see your next story.

He's so cute.

Kyaa~!
I've already read all of the chapters (in one day)! Is there going to be next...? I hope so! This story must go on! Until Hiruma and Mamori married, hahaha!

This is a great story-line, although I'm so curious about why Hiruma leaves Japan. Uuh, I LOVE HIM!

Well.. just hoping for the next chapter, if you made one. I'll be waiting for it! :)

Excellent!

Well, I don't really like this one coz there's no Hiruma in it!

But.. the story was pretty interesting too, and mellow! You've done a great job here, pal...! :D

GAHH! This one is cool too! I wanna see the face of 'this' Hiruma, I bet he looked mellow but cool at the same time!

Uuh, I WANNA SEE IT! XD

PS: nice story, but it'll be great if Yusuke Murata wanna draw this scene!

aw hurry update!!

Ya-ha! Whe! I love it!! XP

Here's my comment/reaction or let's say review for each chapter :

Chappie One : Leaving?!?!?!?! What do you mean you're leaving?!?!?!?!?! Don't tell me that you are going to leave me behind Niisama! XP Kidding! But leaving?!?!?!?!?!?! Yoichi-niisama! I also love the snow part XP

Chappie Two : “I’ve told the ** fat ** and the old man… and I thought maybe you would want to know as well,” Whee! He wanted to tell her too Wah! It's lovely! It's like treating her as one of the closest people around him. XP "You know, for someone that likes to eat cream puffs a lot… …I think I kind a like you more than just a damn manager." I love it! I think it's very much like Niisama!

Chappie Three : "Why am I crying anyway?" cause you like him, Neesama... XP “You just have to trust him, like you always do.” Yes yes! Like you always do! XP

Chappie Four : "At that moment a huge lorry came in front of the clubhouse and at the back of the lorry, was another hundreds of boxes with the same size with the one she’s holding." That was a lot of creampuffs XP Kekekekeke! Way to go Niisama! Sending lots like that! XP ""She looked at the card; something so obvious came blinking at her mind. She flipped the card, and there were the words that mad her annoyed but somehow hoped to receive; "Merry Christmas, ** snack-stealing manager." She inhaled a deep breath of surprise. Somehow, those words are mocking but caring in the same time. And there was more scribbled down at the end of the card;
"p/s- don’t eat a lot of that damn sweet stuff or you’ll die of cavity! YA-HA!"
She gave a warm smile. Like I said, mocking… but caring…"" Ah! So lovely! XP "His face started to sweat. “Umm… well, we made an exception for this… Hahaha….” He laughed nervously." Wahahahaha! Blackmail! Kekekekeke!

Chappie Five : "“TIME-OUT...” a voice called out, only that it did not belong to Musashi, nor Mamori. The voice was dark and cold.
Everyone at the field twitched at the sound of the familiar voice. They turned to the direction of the voice when…
“YA-HA!!”
The loud Ya-Ha was them accompanied by a loud
BBOM!!
The deafening explosion almost broke everybody’s eardrums. The clock had stopped. People were overwhelmed. The black fog started to scatter at the side of the field. At the stairs leading to the football field, a figure emerged from the smokes.
Mamori’s eyes widened.
He threw his usual devil smile down at them. From below, the entire team could see the image of their long lost Quarterback in the Devil Bats uniform, his clear confident green eyes, his undeniable sharp, pointy ears and teeth along with his recognisable long slender stature. And stood proudly down him was his vicious hell dog, Cerberus, blowing out smokes from its nose. She was speechless. Along with the others, she could see that he was taller, his hair was a little shorter than before, skin paler than before and she noticed that there was only one pair of earring instead of two. As much as he looked the same, he was a little different. But no one seemed to be bothered…
because the Devil has returned." Dun dun duun dun! The devil has returned! Kekekekeke!

Chappie Six : ""You ** people, can’t you even win a simple game?”" Kekekeke! That's right! XP "Beside the VAIO laptop on the table, laid the empty cup of coffee, with a white rose perfectly placed inside it." Simple but R-O-M-A-N-T-I-C. Nuff said! XP

Bravo bravo! I placed there the parts I loved the most! Keep up the good work! XP

Your story is amazing! The writing style kinda reminds me of my own... Haha, just kidding!
All you need to do is double-check your grammar and you'll be fine!
Hope you'll updat soon!

where have you gone to! you freakin ** of an author!

come back and do some more fics for hirumamo! ^_^

Ah so cute!
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