haha this is adorable! i loved it,the soccer ball scene was hilarious! good work =D

lol! I could just see the look on Byakuya's face.

You could have done more with it. Although the Byakuya soccer ball incident was totally hillarious.

I loved this part... Soul Society is sick of being invaded.

wow ! that's great!! hahaha...byakuya's afraid of ball!!

Amusing, but needs work with grammar and mechanics.

LOL This is so cute. I loved it!

Keep up the good work I'll be reading

LMAO! so funni storyy! i love irtt!

That was awesome. I love it

LOL! That was very cute! I really like it, especially the part with the soccer ball! I flinch when I see 'em, too, because my sister likes soccer and I have ended up in a few bad situations with the balls. :D

Anyway, this was really good! I hope to see more stuff by you soon!

~KittiKat