Oh WOW! This story is simply AMAZING - honestly - the dialogue, the storyline, the writing style of it all - I just LOVE it!

I was wondering though, shouldn't Lara have been angry at knowing Kurtis had seen a memory of hers? (cos Kurtis had thought she would kill him for it in a previous chapter)

Totally adding this to my favourites!

HI! I think the story is going great! You are a very good writer!

Great chapter, LC - nice to see the fic in action again. I like the opening part from Kurtie's POV. Very sneaky of him to get into the building that way and surprise Lara in the shower. Also he has more self-control than I'd expect, managing to keep his mind on the job with a naked, bound, dripping wet Lara at his feet. I got all hot and bothered at that part. And I don't know if you intended a double-entendre here or not, but ""Nice carpet." cracked me up completely. Given Lara's position and state of undress at that point, he may have been referring to something other than the rug ;)
I like the originality of Kurtis being a Vasiley - it'll be interesting to see where that goes.

Very nice! I really liked this story and I can't wait for the next update. This was a beautifully written story.

It's very well written. I never usually make it through fanfic with chapters as my attention wanders, but despite the fact I don't really get all the stuff about the Nephilim, I was kept reading, even in the chapter with Karel rambling on like a Dan Brown exposition. I liked the Lara/Kurtis bits best and I suspect that's because that what interests you the most, and it showed though in the writing. Maybe you should write a Lara/Kurtis tale that leaves all the AoD stuff behind them?

Oh dear! I just found out today(while I was adding your fic to my site)that I haven't reviewed this chapter!! Silly me!
I must admit I had to go back and read it again.XP
I almost wanted to cry (maybe a little!) when they were torturing him. It was smart of you to use Ferilium. (Reminds me of Kurtis' frisbee! You know what I mean.XP)
Every part of the flashback (along with the whole chapter) was very great. I like the sudden change of style in the last parts of the chapter; From a young,fearful woman's mind to a calm and powerful man's...creature's!

Now my favorite parts:
"He is weak. He is beaten. But he will kill them.
And he does." That 'enter' really has an effect!

"But they pursue him through history, past London struck by a hypothetical pestilence of death that gives way for flames. When he realizes they will never fully leave him, he takes to hiding, takes a mask and never allows it to waver. Walking among them, they lose track, and it is then that it is born- the Damned Five, his cabal. It is the time of his pet alchemist. His Judas." I like how he uses 'his' for every human being as if they're just some simple pets doing his orders.

"She is spared. Another mistake, but then, his human side had always manifested itself whether or not it was desired. Emotions, eating at him." Reminds me of this line in the second chapter "You don't seem the type to swoon over a pretty face."*hinthint!*

Phew, I wrote a novel! Update it like a good LC!
Pash x

Whee!

I've liked all the chapters of this rewrite so far. This one is especially intriguing. I think I understand the Vasiley/Konstantin thing now.

I must say, your beta did an excellent job. ;-)

eagerly awaiting for more of this... great stuff

See?I'm writing a review:PI totally forgot it after that ff problem.
Anyway, you surely are good at writing Lara/Kurtis snapping! Kurtis was excatly what I expected him to be:)
"As for clearing my name, an option will present itself eventually." How?*shifty eyes*
Almost felt pity for the driver when he was talking about the others. "Paid well"...huh,the irony.
Maria Vasiley? hmm,she has her reasons for choosing the name.
I'm eager to read the rest. Updatexx

I must say I am quite angry with myself for not reading your story earlier... But this, this is amazing! The way you describe everything is brilliant and the fact that this story is much different from the majority of the ones written just adds to its excellence. I am really looking forward to reading more of this!

Ah, LC. As much as I love your writing, there's a few things in this last chapter that imo defy logic (or more likely, my logic, but the tiny irrelevant details tend to give manic obsessive Akkons endless sleepless nights!)
First: How did Lara manage to carry an unconscious Kurtis to... where? Imo, it'd have been good to write that scene, because I would have liked to see Lara solve that puzzle, and to me it felt as if something was missing, the scene change too abrupt.
Second: A deep flesh wound (as opposed to a clean cut, for example) needs to heal from the inside-out. Such a wound cannot be stitched close, but has to be drained, usually leaving it half open to allow the inner tissues to supurate. What Lara has just done (ie, patching him up and worse, submerging the wound, is very likely to kill Kurtie... unless that was the idea, that is...)

Never mind, though. Style-wise, the chapter is excellent (loved the dialogue in the car!), and you know I only bother to nitpick because you are one of the few that really pays attention to the details. ;)
Btw, the end of chapter 3, with K. saying "got you" made my skin tingle. It's the Freckles effect all over again!

Last thing: I really adore the idea of starting each chapter with a different quote.

this is soo good, plz dont stop, i luv your writing style, its very professional and i luv the story so far, so keep updating. thnx

Great! Just fabulous! Good exposition of the Nephilic origin. And a rare intro to dark Lara. Well done.

YAY! More Karel goodness! *dances*

The descriptions in this chapter were perfect: Eckhardt's withering/aging body, Karel's wings, etc. And the dialouge was great-- full of information that'll come into play later on.
But most of all, I loved how you took the scene from the game and expanded on it, making it your own. :)
-bm16

Ah... Even with all my dislove for Karel I drool over the Watcher history you imagined. And wings...*drool again**then carefully puts them on Kurtis*
Still, it is difficult for me to go through the text because of too many word - plays...
That's why I am true fan of Katie XD Ok, not.
But I like the story and surely wait for more :)