Please. If you're going to write about Darfur, or any other actual political issue, represent it correctly, research it throroughly, and know what you're doing. Darfur isn't a fictional tool to throw around - it's a region where over 400,0 people have been killed and 2.5 million displaced. It's incredibly shortsighted of you to take such an issue lightly and not have the facts straight.

great story! keep it up. i like it a lot.

Update Soon! :]

Still loving it!!

Loving it

this is a great story!

i like this story so far =D

The writing is technically fine here. You have the grammar down pat.
What is lacking is stuff like characterization and logic.
Timeline? When is this set? In the first chapter it suggests that they've only been broken up a short time. (You talk about how Abby's been second-guessing herself, which suggests S10 or early S11.) And Susan is still around. Yet Carter's in Darfur, not the Congo and he and Kem have been together a while, so it has to be S12.)
Characterization. Everything is WAAY too rushed. Kem tells Carter that she slept with another man, and he's 'fine, lets just break up.' (Remember, this is the guy who dropped everything to rush to Paris to be with her. It's not going to be THAT painless, whatever his feelings are for Abby.) And the second Abby arrives he confesses how much he's missed her and THEY just jump into bed together, having not seen each other or spoken for a couple of years.
Logic: There isn't much. Abby has a job. Whenever this is set, she's either a nurse or a med student or a resident, and NONE of those can just drop everything at a moment's notice and rush off to Africa for 2-3 months. Neither would she likely have the money for a last minute plane ticket half-way around the world. (Khartoum not being exactly a tourist mecca, Travelocity doesn't tend to sell bargain last-minute tix.) Then there's the issue of shots and visas and permits ...
And, once she arrives the DWB gal is there to meet here? When did she have time to call? How did Abby even know Carter was in Darfur? When Carter left Chicago he was going to the Congo. And Carter has a HOUSE in Darfur? His own house? How did he set that up? With bagels and cream cheese, no less! (Hint, that's a very primative and remote part of the world... even by 'Africa' standards.

The obvious point of the story was to get Carter and Abby back together. Which is fine if that's your goal. But the story still has to make logical sense. Further, for it to be a STORY it can't be as cut and dried as all that. You need conflict. Your characters have to face and overcome obstacles. That's what defines a story. Something has to happen to keep these two apart so when they DO get together the reader can feel a sense of satisfaction that 'love conquers all.' (Or whatever.)

Update!!

Thanks for finally updating girl! Great job, you already know I love it. :) For the love of god, don't take so long to update next time! I refuse to update my story until you update this one again!

I really like your interpertation to the story, I like watching this show. I think you use critical parts of your own interpertation to make this story good. I feel like a had a picture in my mind the whole time you were telling the story. I also like how you made Abby go chase after John. All in all though i think it was a good story. Keeping writing more on this topic I would like to know what happens when she gets there

i like the plot. this story is really good.

I'm loving it so far. I'm a true Carby fan and miss them. Please update soon.

Update Very Soon :)

Yes yes and yes! I LOVE IT! You better update soon Mandi!