wow...interesting story... you should really expand on this one it could be a good story...

Smells like Rain...

Great job! I love the part about the slaughtered stuffed animals, as it seems to be the perfect allagory for the end of her innocence. I found your writing style to be very similar to my own. I love that you have such a dedication to proper punctuation and grammar. The part about mixing togehter the After Death Experiences of both Marcus and Krista was an especially nice touch. I didn't even realize just how similar there deaths really were until I read your story. Krista's regret was very on par with her character; good job on that. I hope that you will continue to write, as you apear to have a real talent for it.

can't wait for next chapter!

awesome description. you should totally continue it, its good.

Neat. Is this a one-shot, or is it going to be updated?

Why are vampires so damn hot?

Awesome job :)

AWSOME STORY! I love it, update please!

I finally got around to reading it. Right the Dream sequence was kind of strange but I'm sure you'll explain it later. I think that the teddy bears should have lived, that part was sad but it's probably just me.

that was real good. i hope your gonna continue.

Wow...that was surprisingly good...

that was real good! i hope you update soon!