omg you have to continue this story! i love it! please! i cant wait!

I am REAALY Liking your writing style!

Wow. this is one of the best Obito reborn-y fics Ive read! Possibly The best! You are an ecxeptional writer! Check out some of my stories. My best ones so fare are YOU! Kimiko(Complete) And Sotari. San kyuu!

Aweosme story man!
Oh comeon! You have left such a cliffhanger and havent updated for over a year! That is just not fair! Get up your lazy ** and update dang it!

O.O Okay poor Yuichi, things just do not seem to go his way do they?

But this is a really good and interesting story that you have created and hope you can update sometime in the future.

Still interesting.

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Can't wait for more.

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Still interesting.

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Liking it now.

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Interesting.

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Ohs, what a unique plot! I don't know why, but I love stories about Obito and Itachi-that Obito could have had an influence on him. ^^ It's sweet.

Anyways, story stuff!: The dialogue I think should be considered a bit more carefully--like, I think it can be expressed better, and I'm sure you can do it! *thumbs up*! o_o!

The layout of your story is good, I just suggest that instead of the dashes like "-" try using those page break thingos has when you upload and edit! xD Saves time and looks better than a billion dashes. No offense. xD

Another thing, looking at the first chapter, ums,...>_<...okay this might sound like grammar-freak sorta thingo bit...

Capital. Letters.

The way you wrote improve as you uploaded more chaps, but if you have time, try go over the first 2 or 3 chaps and changing it around. I think it'll make your fic look more 'professional' fanfiction-wise and makes people more willing to read it (I can't speak on behalf of anyone except myself, but when I saw the first chapter, I almost stopped reading because of the stereotypical view that bad grammar is hard to read and thus not quite worth it lol! I persevered because you had such a interesting plot!). That stereotype is an instinct, by the way, haha, so it's not exactly true. x)

And another important thing: no need to rush. The first and second chapter is hasty, I feel; take your time in writing and thinking out scenes and expressing emotions. ^^

Ums, on a note, I don't think Iruka despised Naruto as such, but may have felt bitter since every time he looks at Naruto-like everyone else-he remembers what he has lost. I would think that instead of 'despised', Iruka, if not caring for Naruto, would be 'indifferent' to him. x)

I dunno what other people have suggested, but for the Uchiha massecre, since Itachi has been taken off the path of a psychopath, I suggest maybe using what Kishimoto used, or a part of it to influence? Possibly the Uchiha's do something else that provokes another thing...okay, I'm being really vague so I'll stop now.

One thing: How's the names Yuichi and Naruto justified? o_o

Last note: on ideas, reflect on WHY you wrote this story with the plot it has (eg. why did you make Obito reincarnated? What's the purpose of doing so?) and making plans for these. That is, how is Obito's reincarnation going to affect the original storyline? Is he just thrown in there for the sake of being there, or does he affect people and run into dilemma's as such?

All of this I'm pretty sur eyou know, so I'll log off now. Good luck, and bye bye~

This is a very interesting story. I've been meaning to read it for ages and even had the first chapter pulled up, but time worked against me. But FINALLY I was able to read this and I'm glad I have. ^_^

Since you're looking for constructive criticism, I would like to mention three things; they're not big, but on a rainy day you could skim things and see if you agree with me. But before I say what they are, I'll say that I noticed that they got better with each chapter, so you ARE improving.

The first is that the dialogue is awkward. Particularly in the first chapter—slightly less so in the following ones—it seems that the dialogue is kind of mechanical and, in extreme cases, contrived. The only real fix for that is to spend many hours sitting and listening to other people talk with one another (not you, or else you won't be able to concentrate), but if you'd like a more instant gratification you could check out some of my fics. I generally don't plug my own stuff, but I've been told my dialogue is well-written.

The other two things are related—both involve description. The description of the settings is thin, though it's essentially adequate, and Obito/Yuichi/Naruto is the only one who's gotten any real attention because of his feature-shifting skills; the death god, for example, has had no description given whatsoever. The intention may be to convey mystery but it unfortunately tends to cause confusion more often; even if it's the same death god seen in the manga and anime, describing it is important. The same goes for Itachi and the Third. Shino's description was good, since it was a first meeting—enough for the reader to have a guess as to who it was, but not know exactly what he looks like as a child (information which you will supply more of at the next meeting and so on).

That's it. Like I said, they're not huge but when you have time it would be worth looking back at them, and you've been steadily improving since the first chapter—things are looking up! Also, by the by, make sure you double-check your grammar; your spelling is good, but there are places where the grammar got left behind.

I'm sorry to hear that you've been so sick. Unfortunately, the only options I can offer are to live in a bubble or try taking echinacea and goldenseal; they'll boost your immunity and, if you have a runny nose or post-nasal drip, dry up your sinuses. I've recently been taking it (I think it's the Nature Valley brand) because my usually mild pollen allergy went from stuffy nose to post-nasal drip and I ended up with tonsilitis or something—I had a fever and sore throat and all sorts of crap. Once I got better I took that stuff and haven't had a problem since.


—RN (LS)

Its a great premise. I hope you continue with this story. The plot is well though out and interesting.

...Wow. Talk about identity crisis. Update. I need some fics!

I admit. I've seen this fic around for quite some time but never bothered to read it. I shoould have. Damn! But that was a good story! Keep it up and I'd love to read the next chapter.