Awesome story! I thought that Kim and Shego got together a bit quickly... but that's just a matter of opinion. I also didn't really like the arrangement with Will, but that's just 'cuse Kim and Shego earned being together. The epilogue redeemed the end though, so it was all good. ^^ Great job!

i was enjoying this story up to this point but i've got to say i've never really believed kim could beat shego in a real fight. i don't think i can finish this story now cause it all seems rather silly now oh well ur still one of my fav KP authors

Phew that was a long story, fantastic but long lol very great job i am now gonna look at your other works. im trying to write fan fics of my own if there is any tips you can give me they would be greatly appreciated. oh yeah and KiGo all the way!

Wow...didn't see that one coming, well now that i think about it, if Shego hated the Shogun, who other then her brothers eh? ah well that was defiantly a surprise.

This is so good but after team impossible just did i gotta say this. "Men suck!" everything so far, aside from ron and some other good fellows, the men are just ass holes. Man their just annoying lol

Its probably to late to worry about this but from what i can surmise is that Mika is kims mom right? if that is the case you should have had her name be Anne because that's her name in the actual show and you said if the person lacked a name, be it first or last, you'd make on up, so if mika is kims mom then her name should be Anne Possible, not Mika Possible...sorry for the rant i notice some little things anyway having said all that this is one amazing story you must know a lot about Japanese culture and hell the TV show for that matter lol very good job, defiantly a favorite

-dono is actually an honoriffic that denotes more respect than -sama.

That was fantastic.
This is actually my third effort at trying to read it... I was put off by the first few paragraphs of the first chapter several times, as it bored me immensely. Thank god for Deviantart and your other stories, because they accidentally convinced me to give this another shot.
I admit that there were technical flaws, such as some of the geisha details, and the sheer amount of enemies they could combat in a short space of time, without killing themselves, and on top of that, there were glaring convention and spelling errors. But I can overlook that, because the story draws you in. The portrayal of all the relationships, the thin line between black and white, or perhaps the huge gray area, and the little things that I didn't expect, all compiled to make it a compelling and intricate story. After all, it's about suspension of disbelief.
The repeated Japanese was both good and bad. There were a few times where you used Japanese and English would have not only been as good, but better. It was really not necessary beyond the use for clothing, swords, and techniques, as those don't translate well to several centuries in the future, in another country. Speaking of time, there were a few anachronistic features that really irritated me, and if you ever choose to edit this, you should look for them.
I thoroughly enjoyed the twists at the end, both with Hego and Will Du... Couldn't they have just told the elders that Kim had clearly been damaged in one of her fights, and thus unable to have children? It would have been a fairly clean solution, considering that she was a ninja.
There was too much else I liked to go over it all, so just assume that it was amazing. And then, of course, there's the fact that you have over 500 reviews, and people are still reviewing two years later, which kind of speaks for itself. I'm borderline worshipful.
-Pyrogirl

That was a really good story. The details of the time period were good as was the characterization. The whole thing was a treat to read.

Heather

I love this fic. I love the fact that all the villains were given a part. Also, that Kim is confused with a fox spirit. That was just funny, and I can see how some would confuse her with a fox spirit. My favorite scene was the typical family breakfast scene.
-Kate

the first tiem i tried to read it, the first part of chapter one put me off so i stopped and left it alone to go fine another. but then your unique iddea intrigued me and i could not help myself, and i was soon drawn into the story and literally could not stop reading it.

This sensational and enthalling piece of art is truly a masterpiece. i have never seen something so unique, so well written in my life.

Id gladly read this story twice over.

you my friend, is an amazing author. Awesome.

Pure talent
Samantha
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wow! ok. title so fits! *eyes stil bulging and mouth agape*

absolutely awsome!

Wonderful!! I was sad to see it end, but I thought you did a great job with this. Loved all the Japanese sprinkled into the story!

Ah, and this is where it all starts to fall apart. First loophole that can't be ignored - the fact that a trained bodyguard seemingly knows what geisha are supposed to do/be like - and whose suspicions *should* have been immediately aroused by "Akako"'s behaviour when he entered her room. And that's not even taking into consideration the fact that one of the "demure musicians" had a needle shuriken to his throat. By ignoring/not addressing this, it becomes a flaw in the story; one an intelligent reader wouldn't overlook. I can't. After a big bump in the road like this, I have to go "Whoa, slow down here a minute..." Inconsistencies in characterization detract majorly from the quality of a story. The other thing that's been nagging at me since I began reading is this - you try too hard to detail every thought in the characters' heads. It's like trying to watch a movie, only to be interrupted every other scene by someone hitting the pause button and putting an x-ray scene to the actors' minds. Try to remember that a story is often about "showing", and not "telling". I call it "overdetailing". No such word, I know, but I think it describes it best. For example, the following:

She thought that she was doing the redhead a favor by taking her out, so she was slightly offended that the young woman would question her about it.

The words she chooses to use, plus the fact that she countered ought to be enough to show that she was offended. Detail is one thing, but it gets tedious when you go into too much depth. Redundancy - avoid it.

Well, that's it for now. I'm not very keen on continuing the story, but I'm going to try to. I like the premise of this story, and I think you've got some very good ideas, but they simply get bogged down with too many technicalities. Still, all the best with your writing, and I hope you improve!