I'm not to big on OC's to tell the truth. i have nothing against yours though. Naomi seems like a good character. Nice chapter. I'm sorry if whatever happened was bad. Update when you can!

Great chapter. Hope the writter's block goes away.

Nice, you pulled that off really well! Still have writer's block? Bummer. Hope it doesn't last too long! Update soon!

Writer's block? Hope you recover soon! Once again you have produced an excellent chapter. As for the next one, I guess we'll get to see how you write an action scene. I can't wait! Oh and good luck!

cool story i really like it

*rides along with continuity of story*
*suddenly smacks into the brick wall, which separates the written part of the story with the part remaining in your head*
OOF! Gah! It was going so well! And... then... it... stopped... please update soon!

Good chapter. I do believe that invisibility and intangibility are seperate. On the show it sometimes shows Sam and Tucker's eyes following him when he's intangitble.

Don't worry, intangibility and invisibility are separate. You skipped a few days, but that's a good thing. It would have dragged on if you wrote them. I thought it turned out good. Great for someone who was ill! Can't wait for the next chapter!

I like it! I believe that intangibility and invisibility because sometimes you can see Sam and Tuckers eyes fallowing him when he is intangible (Like in the beginning of Maternal Instincts) Anyway great job! I can’t wait to read the next part.

This is good. I don't care if changes occur, as long as it basically follows what happened. (Meaning, zapped by the portal) It's ok if you change it, just write well and I'll read it. I like it so can you continue? Please? I hope you don't get offended by this review, I'm not critisizing you. (Did I spell that right?) This is your first? Sweet! I can honestly say, for a first, it's really good. Hope you update soon!

Good start. No big mistakes that I can see. Update soon.

I like how your setting up the story and still letting it progress at a decent pace. Keep up the good work, it has a lot of potential!