Hi, Author here, First I'd liek to thank those that have given me the constructive critisizm this story needed, and this summer i will be revising this and the connected stories as well. Now that will mean that this stories focus will change a bit but don;t worry i have 2 to 3 more chapters togo on this one.

Now, specifically, to Kurokami Tenshi, you seem to understand very little in the ways of manners, and subjects to write on, so let me thell everyone that I did write a rahter negative review of your Story, Mayuka's Lover simply on one complaint. I can never see Tenchi making love to his daughter and baring children from it. Now your style of writing holds promise as long as you stick to the norm a much as Fan fiction is.

So, I take your comments with as much heart as a flushing toilet, becuase that's where your comments and maturity seem to reside.

I apologise for my other reviewers at the lack of maturity in one Kurokami Tenshi, but I would encourage you all to tell her what you feel about her story of incest yourself.

Nuff said, dennisud

Do tell me what is wrong with my story? I think it would be odd, if Ryoko fell in love with sasamii, but it came to me in a dream, then i WOULD WRITE IT, IF I THOUGHT IT WAS FUNNY. But alas.. It has yet bto happen.. besides, the story is based on love between the boy I love who goes by the name of tenchi.. and my nickname is Mayuka.. please stop making me feel bad... I don't want to hurt people.. but I can't help the love I have for the one who means so much to me... so FUCK OFF AND DIE VIOLENTLY because my boyfriend says so.

Kurokami tenshi

Hey not a bad fic... I would never had thought about putting the two knights and the two G.P girls together. It would be a really good fic if you got a grammar check, theres a couple of typos. And the characters are a alittle OOC, but other than that, fine.

interesting, please continue it soon.

cool! write more! please? i love it. it is soooo great. go on! you know you want to! Please?

An interesting idea of involving the knights with the GP babes!

Okay, you have a good first two chapters here. Two comments, though. Kiyone seemed a little OOC in the second chapter. She usually doesn't behave romantically. Also, the two knights, Azaka and Kamidake are a little OOC as well. That is just my opinion, but everyone has their own style of writing. I finally saw the pictures. They are both very nice, especially the one with Tenchi and Kiyone. Well, that's all for now. Keep the pace smooth and steady for this story and I would definitely like to see the next chapter of this story. Ja ne!

awesome please continue

This is one of those stories that has the potential to be good, but trips up too much. What is it about romance stories that makes authors want their characters to leap down each other's throats immediately? On the other hand, if this is a story in a saga, in which all of the events of this story are justified, then it's ok. But please! Take things slowly!