Aw! I loved this I almost cried when I found out he was killed!

I really like this...I hope you're able to update soon! _

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wow he died!

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yes sad...and evil for you for it being a cliffhanger!

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haha, that was great I can't wait for the next chappie!

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HELLO!

I've just read your story, and I can't help but comment on it! It's realy interesting, I've never seen am story about Watari's death. The way you focus on character's feelings and thougs, in Watari's story and death happenig at the moment, is wonderful. Since now, I've only read about it throug flash-backs, so I'm delighted than someone decide to write a whole storie about it.

So...Lots of kisses, I will be reading you!

Btw, I'm a huge Watari fan. you kill him... (sobs). Come on, 'Tari, you can go over it!

Yes, the dialouge is much less confusing when you start in a new line like that :D

And merry Xmas to you too :D

Always a good story! Keep it up! And English is not your first language? Then, what is it? Lol, I'm a bit curious... Because, I'm French and I really like your story!

very cute story so far. Tsuzuki and Watari have always been my two favorite YnM characters! I just have to make one comment/suggestion. It's about how you indicate dialogue in your stories. Dialogue is indicated with the use of quotation marks on BOTH sides of what is being said. example - Koneko proclaimed, "I love Yami no Matsuei!" Maybe the way you use double commas before and quotation marks after whatever is being said is a Dutch thing. I don't know. In English however, only quotation marks are used for pointing out spoken words. If you could make this one change it would make your stories a lot easier to read.

Koneko .

You know, for English not being your first language, you sure do a heck of a lot better with it than some writers on this site! So kudos to you for that.

But, can I please do a tad of nitpicking? For your dialogue, I've noticed you do this:

,,(insert talking here)"

which I have to say still throws me off a bit, even this far into the story. Try using this instead:

"(talking)"

with the quotations on both sides of the dialogue. :) Other than that, very good job with spelling and grammatical issues.

I'm not fond of Sanye... seems like a right bastard if you ask me. [ And I like how you incorporated Tatsumi into this as well. It makes me sad how there are so few fics dealing with both Watari and Tsuuzki, both as friends and as a pairing. (I personally like both! - )

Keep up the great job; I can't wait for your next chapter!

Good job! Hope next chapter will come soon! Want to know how they will meet each other next time!

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Tatsumis first aperance!

Yay!

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Whoo! Now that I actually have time to read again, this is all very interesting so far, and yay for Watari and Tatsumi meeting

I like this so far, it's very cute. :) Keep up the great job!

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Keep up the greatness!