Great story! I love the details in this one. The whole idea of addressing an AU from a dark-sider's perspective is very creative. Two thumbs up!

Hey, this story is pretty nice so far. I like the personality you've given your characters (especially the rather explosive personality of Vynkar, it tends to make his interaction with other characters as full of suspense as defusing a bomb - and about just as dangerous, too). I think I'll have fun reading the rest... Your writing is good, too, and you're very good at giving each character their own voice and personality.

Ah, just one thing. The character you named "Soon Ded", the pun was on purpose, right ? But seriously, the moment I saw his name, I knew how he was going to end up, heh.

Anyway, great job !

Dear Autoress/Autor, what should I say? I don't know, what to do with my weak English, but I'll try.
Very good story! So many details and personalities. I like Arkyn, Tel and Cassidy. Brave, smart, goodhearted girl. Her parents didnt know WHO lost, really... but... This damned "Jedi" IS NOT Jedi. I know nothing about his classes and his Master's teaching, but someone should tell him: Jedi served Republic - Republic did'nt serve Jedi! Respect for any form of life etc. etc.
I am Imperial sympathizer, Jedi made many mistakes. I know it. In Your story Jedi are disgusting. Rebellion too.
Congratulations for Lianna's father. I like his personality... I hope Cassidy will be safe and meet Aquinos someday... and, maybe - maybe - they will talk before fight. And I like this, in last chapter - words of Arkyn. You know, "not for Dark Side, sects of ancient beliefs - for Empire and its innocent citizens"
I am sorry for my English again, I hope You know I LIKE IT. Greetings from Poland!

“Maybe”, Arkyn said, getting up and wiping the blood from his face. “But one thing we know for sure: We are the good guys! And that means you can’t win!”

That's the spirit.

Great Story

Yes, it is certainly nice for the jedi to be portrayed for what they often are, as to often they are just presented as the good guys no matter what they do.

intriguing

nice

very cool

very interesting

Interesting story,

Very different for most of the stuff on this site.

Keep up the good work.

nice & interesting

nice

interesting... I would love to see more

Hmm, it looks like the conference for both sides. Interesting to see their perspectives on the clash. Though I still think that attack on the Palace was "brainless"...

I see that you are patterning Aurelia on "Kim Possible" :)

I still think you can use her in your fic, since I did not think it was possible for someone to determine the "force sensitivity" without some sort of "Midichlorian" test blood or other type. (Just don't make her into some toady under that ridiculous Loam Redge - personally I hope he runs into that Jedi)

Hopefully soon you will reveal a little more about that awesome Jedi. He is very interested in whatever artifact he is researching. Hopefully it will not send to the dark-side, although he seems to be almost there in some ways already!

I am really continuing to love your story. Especially where you keep giving us the "viewpoint" from both sides. I loved it where the "imperial commando" observing the combat in the Museum observed "- who else would attack a kid with a lightsaber – who else would attack a kid anyway" to identify a "Jedi". I loved that, it really shows the "mind set" in the empire.

I was glad though you managed to "save" Aurelia, I really find her character refreshing and appealing. She reminds me of a young "Mara Jade" I guess...:)

I was surprised at the poor tactics the Rebels used in their attack though. With the exception of your mystery Jedi, they really went in "dumb" and did not accomplish much. In fact I am not sure what they were trying to accomplish (terror?). I think they need to dig up a "General Dodonna" or maybe even a Han Solo somewhere for some hints about how to do it right!

Well I am still enjoying this, so I will keep an eye out for another update. (Please keep Aurelia in your story)...:)