FanFiction.Net - unleash your imagination
| FanFiction.Net - unleash your imagination |
|
| Home Just In Communities Forums Beta Readers Dictionary Search | Login Register Extras |
| ReviewsGalore 2006-12-05 ch 1,  | abuseStory: 8.5/10. Seems to be pretty good so far. The Death Eater scene was okay, but pretty typical. I'm not sure about this muggle singer, you could pull it off pretty good, but she could turn out to be a Mary Sue as well. Characters: 7/10. I hate to say it, but the death eaters acted sort of like teenagers. Creativity: 8/10. The muggle singer is a good idea if you play it right. Nothing about the Death Eater scene was that original. Writing: 8/10. Few mistakes, but occasionally fills sort of clipped. Like I said earlier, the Death Eaters' dialogue needs a little work. Believability: 7.75/10. The Death Eater scene is pretty believable other than the dialogue. The muggle singer has the potential to be very unbelievable, so be careful. Overall: 7.75/10. Has the potential to be a very good story if you implement more realistic dialgoue, make the characters more mature and do not include Mary Sues. |