 god of all 2009-06-11 . chapter 8Great chapter and story so fair pleaces continue the story soon. |
 Tri-Emperor of The Twilight 2008-12-10 . chapter 8This is really good. |
 deitarion/SSokolow 2008-11-28 . chapter 8I hope you get back to this sooner or later. There are far too few fics which show youma this way. Heck, I can probably count them out right now:
- Hidden in Darkness by Space Pirate Hamster (The best by far)
- Youma ½ (Different enough to be the best in its own category)
- Coupled Union - Tick Tock (An Addventure thread that's also very good. It also has sympathetic youma and a dark general who isn't all bad, but the feel is quite different from yours.) |
 Megatyrant 2008-07-24 . chapter 1Ok, now this is getting interesting. I can't wait to see where you're gonna go from here. Update plz. :) |
 enderverse 2008-07-19 . chapter 5a bad guy willing to compromise, awesome. |
 New lord of darkness 2008-02-20 . chapter 8update, please! |
 jusenkyo ruler 2007-11-25 . chapter 8like it when will the nerima wrecking crew appear, wil shadow be the main villan and why does no one not think it is stange with hotaru going out with a girl? Well I guess Hikau and Michiru wont complain but everyone else? I wonder |
 Natsu No Uta 2007-11-25 . chapter 1So happy to find a Ranma as Sailor Chaos story. I've been looking for months. No one ever focuses on the other senshi besides the core nine when there were so many introduced in Stars. I am still searching for a Ranma/Seiya (Sailor Starfighter)because she and the rest of the starlights have a similar problem in gender bending as he does. But anyway I'm ranting please update soon. |
 keichan2 2007-10-30 . chapter 8Well... I finally found the time to read this (had to re-read from the start, as I didn't remember what happened, but that's my fault, this time...).
I have to say that Shadow and his daughters were lucky! Had they approached Ranma and Hotaru out of the blue, they would have had to go over the lack of trust... Now, after the fight (even though it could have been planed...) they don't have to start by "we come in peace"... Their acts told that by themselves.
Please update soon, I wonder how the meeting will go... |
 Tatsu-ZZmage 2007-09-25 . chapter 8Interesting chapter, a Third party of youma that want to co-exist with the scouts i like it, it so far diverged from the norm that its almost a total new idea, hell maybe even a Total new idea all its own. Can't really tell whats new on then Internet ^_~ |
 AshK 2007-09-21 . chapter 8Nice work on this update! Keep up the good work!
Sincerely,
AshK |
 Dumbledork 2007-09-01 . chapter 8Great chapter. |
 ranko lina Inverse 2007-09-01 . chapter 8Aw we have to wait to see what happens next. Ranma first date with Hotaru was short but hopefuly they get to finish after there talk with Shadow and his daughters. |
 Dean Angel 2007-09-01 . chapter 1this is not the first Ranma as sailor chaos out there ...but the first one i can't find anymore T_T
in any case let us see where this story goes |
 notBald 2007-09-01 . chapter 4Oddly enough I had a mental image of a male Ranma throughout your fic until this last chapter. Hmm, I wonder why... back button... back button... ah her personality is close to many all-male Ranma fics I've read.
Anyway this is a technically good fic, just a little dry on the dialog side. Take this example:
Quote: “Hey! I figured out a while ago that you probably weren’t being controlled by Sailor Chaos and went to ask Hotaru about it. There’s no need for us to fight right now, so why don’t we gather these girls up and take them back to your friends restaurant and wait for them to wake up there so we can talk?”
It would have read better as:
Ranma: "Hey! Old hag! Are we gonna fight or not?"
Hotaru: "No she's not, Pluto never fights!"
Ranma: "'Fraid to break a nail?"
Pluto: "You little twerps, I'll show you a thing or two about fighting!"
Ranma sighed and got in a ready stance. He had only known her a short time but something told him Hotaru would be the death of him...
IOW, spread the verbal love a little and show some emotion.
Cheers |