Aw super cute i loved it!

Hey. I really like the idea you have here, but the execution is a bit coarse. I just have a few hints to what can make your writing better. Try not to say phrases like 'Little did Wolfram knew, the black-haired heika had slowly fallen in love with him, day by day and night by night'. Rather than outright stating it, try to show it in Yuuri's actions and attitude towards Wolfram. Let the reader see, don't tell them what's happening.

Also, a phrase like 'Okay, I’ll just stop it there and won’t give you any details. I’ll just leave it to your own creative mind to imagine it' is badly placed. There are ways of 'fading to black' in writing, something as simple as a scene change denoted by a patterned symbol such as '...*...' or even a cheesy line like 'That night they rediscovered each other'. Crossing the fourth wall in a story is bad manners on the part of the author.

I liked your story and hope you keep at it. Good luck.

it's really adorable and as a side note i love the relation between Wolfram and Condad. I always felt like it was missing in the anime. it was implied and hinted at but.. well, good job!

its hahauwe not hohouwe! it was funny to read. 1)is the stable the only place for 'that kind of thing'? 2)i dont think its possible to only take 30 minutes to do it!=>it should take half an hour just to get off that complicated sexy uniform!!(unless they didnt do it propery) must pracice!!

:PxD;D*Sakura~chan

This was really great! You'd be great at write a chapter fic about KKM! ^.^

wolfram was a bit ooc here but all-in-all it's good... keep up the good work! also... it's... funny how you chose the stables out of all places! haha...

aw.. *w*
so cute.. ^^.. yeah!! >0<
kya!!.. the horse has own intelligence! ._.U

ja ne!! ^^

~nice story!! n_n a little grammar check though please.. but all in all, the story was great! n_n YUURAM FOREVER!! XD

aw thats just the sweetest yuuram ever! ^-^

Very funny fic ^_^ The love scenes are a bit harsh and crude...¬¬U but the humour balances it really well...

Just some mistakes:
- The correct word for respecfully saying "mother" isn't "hohoewe", it's "hahaue".
- As shown (a lot) in the series, in Shin Makoku, they don't use spoon and fork, they use that weird thing called "spork"

that's a great one...i want more...
i hope you can make more one-shots like that//