Story's nice, but could still use some work on your grammar and typing.

This story is really good.
I like the storyline a lot.
Great job

aw~! i love Raph! and i love the part where he meets mona!! so nice yet...romanticish(?) lol
love the ending!^-^

It's nice to see Irma in this story.

I got a little confused with your script format slash descriptive tone. But it contains an fav pairing of mine, so it's a little overlooked. Love it, cute, wanna see more of it. Lol.