This is a very good, humorous ficlet. I can't wait to see what else you come up with.

this is confusing me
its kinda bad to but don worry your other stuff mignht be good

I know you don't speak English very well, but this fic appears to have been simply run through Babelfish or some similar translation system online.

I doubt you will get any solid reviews, because many of your sentences do not make sense. In fact, I can't really get the gist of your story even. I'm sure your writing in Portuguese is very good, but this story in English does not make sense. I'm sorry.