I really like this; the descriptions for everything they're feeling are spot-on. I love that first sentence.

The only thing I would tweak would be the last sentence. What I gathered it means is "The living become worse", or "those left behind become worse", but by using "you", that thought is not conveyed as clearly. I think that's where the confusion from the earlier reviewer came from.

Ah, I always wish I could write like you.
To deliver such emotion in a few superbly chosen words...it's a gift. I love the substitution of the word 'tears' with 'salt', it makes their grief somewhat more tangible.
Keep up the lovely work!

this make my day really... its te exact words that i need today.

but well.. its sad and real at the same time... um great words for a great moment.

really like it!

eva

I absolutely love this. :3 Well done.

Very sad and beautifully written too. I liked the silence metaphor; a very true picture of death. Just one typo: "everyone of them" - that should be 'every one' - two words.

The only thing I didn't get was the conclusion in the last two lines. It doesn't seem to follow from the rest of the piece.

That was a really moving fic! I feel so sorry for Cloud. Good job!