It was really good, but I was a little disappointed in the ending =( ~Snyder~

I dont think your storie sucks. Its cool. You should make another.^_^

OMG..you shouldnt have waited so long...tht was absolutly adorable..especially the ending..aw

great job

I liked this. But I think the formatting is a bit weird... Sometimes it looks like you pressed enter half way through a sentence (but you probably didn't!!) It's still very sweet.

Maybe you could lengthen each part a little, and make it into a chapter-ed story. If you wanted to do that, and wanted help I would love to help you with it. (Though you're good, and you don't really need *help*)