Sloppy, but I loved it. Not as good as your other stuff, if I am being critical, but then, it was an early one, was it not?

Ack, I'm just fluff and slop... WITH yaoi of course ;)

Supersloppy.

Paragraphs please! *cries in the corner* No, Im not a grammer freak,I just wish for paragraphs! sobs! anyway this is a nice way to end the story. If you would, click over to my page, and read Smile. Its another ending I thought of to go with FFVIIAC. I liked your ending! Keep it up!

So even though I don't get the CloudSephiroth thing, this was nice. It's written in an interesting style also. Gonna check out some other things now...

Nice and fluffy :D
I love the Cloud/Sephiroth pairing XD

Pretty good fic but I think it would really help to make it more clear if you split it into more paragraphs (paragraphs don't have to be more than a sentence in length). Also, remember to put quotation marks around any words spoken out loud, even if it's being told from the speakers perspective.

If their communicating by a means other than simple words (like telepathy or another language)you can use italics or bold or put different symbols before and after their words and put an example at the top explaining what the italics or bold or different symbols mean.

Hope this helps!