Alright so I only have one issue with this... I REALLY wish it was longer! I like the idea of the plot though so it's still a good job in my book :)

-I'll Be Your Lie

T.T

omg tts so sad.

no happy ending i guess.

i cant read japanese for the world so i'm glad u put up a translation.

thankies XD

aw, this was sad...

Q_Q ... I'll mourn him! . I'd collect the Dragonballs and wish him back if I could, and then he could wish for eternal life! o That was so sad... you almost made me cry *lie, is crying* I'm not crying, I've got something in my... eye is all.. _ ... *cries anyway*

you should continue this... SO COOL!

*crying* I love it. I admit, Orochimaru is prolly my least favorite character, but one of my fav pairings is OroJira! T_T

that was sad, but i liked it

obsessive

The short descriptions and lines worked well, I liked parts of it. I'm not sure I like the idea of Orochimaru speaking about how it hurt, I don't know, something feels a little off about it. But that aside, I like the rest, particularly how Orochimaru reacted to Jiraiya's apology.

Aww (cries)... that was really emotional and sad (sniffle)... and I can honestly say it made me tear up...

I loved it! Believe it!

Poor Oro… ;.; but at least Jira was there with him ;.;

Very good. Sad, but great ficcy nonetheless _

AW. Thats so sad and poetic. I am so moved by the feeling in the story.

Poor Orochimaru but uh what's hurting him?.._;

like your poem(or whatever it is)

but i have a feeling that if oro dies in the manga/anime, jiraiya really will be the only one who will mourn for him.

Huh ? Can Orochimaru ... cry ?

It's really , really cute ... and so sad !

Sasuke ; ... Orochimara-sama'll never cry like this ...

Apo ; Are you sure of that ?

Sasuke ; I'm his STUDENT ! I know him !

Apo ; ... hm ...

Yeah , I'm an Itachi and Orochimaru's fan - and I love romance with Oro ! ...so I really loved your fic ... !

Thanks for translating it in english ... I can't speak any word of japanese ... so english and french are the two only langages that I can read ( ... sorry for my bad grammar ... It's horrible to write like this ! )...

If you've got time to spend .. I've read this fic on yesterday .. i's also an Oro/Jira ... and I will translate it too in french ;

See ya for another review !

Apolline or Fleurdpine from time to time

aside from the harry potter one *gack* this is one of your best written...actually, it's so artsy it probably iis batter.

keep it up Onee-san!

Heh, I understood the japanese almost as well as this one, I just surprised myself XD I really like both, dont know which more. There was one mistake though, towords the beginning instead of 'Naruto' you accidently put 'Natuto' :P