Excellent. Good characterizations, uproariously funny, and extremely quotable.

Also, as a bonus, this has been a rather bad day for me, and this fic cheered me right up. Thanks!

Very nicely written. I like your artistically liberal use of paragraph breaks.

Two things though:

1) It took me a second to realize "o" was supposed to be a scene divider. At first I thought it was an "Oh" type bit at the end of the song.

2) Did you mean "boor" instead of "bore" in the song?

“…I did not authorize that…”

Yeah, that’s pure Zetta for you.

I’m glad to see that you managed to tie all the threads together…Drake’s three henchmen get turned into Hell Kitties. This has been an exceptionally funny story. I don’t think I’ve every seen this combination of ploys used for comedic effect.

Of course it isn’t one of those flat Netherworlds. All Drake has to do is find a large enough rock and then…WHAM!

But all in all, it’s been a good day for him. He didn’t have to eat any poisoned food, after all.

“You’re no Voice of Conscience,” Snivly whimpered... “You’re a freaking super-ego.”

Ah yes. My daily dose of Freud rolled into a spectacularly funny chapter.

“You’ll weep like a canon purist on a fanfiction website.”

Breaking the fourth wall? Or maybe the fifth? Does Snivly even know about fanfiction? Does it even matter? It’s incredibly funny.

And add in the conversation between Drake and Salome…this was a great chapter.

And so, another bad day turned good ended for Zetta... And Drake is still unlucky as ever.

Well, it was a funny fic. Too bad Zetta didn't think that Salome still had her knife. It might have saved him from being temporaly a harmless ladybug.

So... What are you gonna write next? You wrote so many MK fics... Well, I'll check your profile to see. See ya!

I only have one thing to explain why this piece is so wonderful, and here it is: "You’ll weep like a canon purist on a fanfiction website." SQUE! I love you, Raye!

I was wondering what the hell happened to you... I started to think something happened to you in real life...

Anyway, good chapter as always. And for once, Drake did have a good idea. Too bad Salome took it the wrong way...

Zetta should really think his plans better, don't you think? If he doesn't go back to his body soon...

Extremely funny chapter. I don’t think Salome would appreciate being compared to a wet prinny. I also like the fact that Zetta assures the reader that he’s never cuddled a prinny before.

The Robert the Bruce allusion was superb, especially at the end when Zetta looks up at the ladybug and decides he’s going to squish it. The scenes after Zetta makes his “change” are also very, very funny. Throughout all of your Makai fics, you’ve done a great job of writing Zetta believably, even when he’s in the most unbelievable situations.

But it looks like Salome might end up upsetting Zetta’s plan before he gets a chance to pull it off. Somehow, I think he’ll come through in the end.

Today’s lesson- never trust faux-Scottish cannibal zombies.

What a completely unexpected turn of events- Zetta being undone by his own diligence in designing things. I loved the line, “If their asses are getting baked, help them out. If they’re beating feet out of here, bake their asses.” That kind of philosophy is so thoroughly Zetta. I also liked his version of extremism- decent wages, insurance. What’s a self-respecting overlord going to do?

...Zetta will never get a break with life, right? One thing after the other...

And now, he may have to ask Drake for help... God help him before he sinks to THAT level.

“Die, thou cadaverous Caledonian anthropophage!” Zetta seethed.

“HA!” exulted Zetta. “You don’t have any more theme music than I do! Your little plaid-loving haggis-orgy cult is going down!”

Great lines. Enough said.

The whole bit about Drake’s species was hilarious. I like him describing the puff-puff at the end of his tail. I think you write a very good Drake, especially how he manages to keep his ego even in the middle of a mana nulling cage while being forced to balance food on his nose. His considering whether or not to bash his head against the iron bars was also funny.

So, Zetta’s got a room that’s completely upholstered in porcupine hide. He likes those porcupines. In your other fic, I believe he crosses them with elephants.

And Salome keeps wolverines for pets. Ha.

The commentary of Drake’s three lackeys was extremely funny. I liked the description of Zetta’s hammers- Large, Very Large, and Strictly for Elephantine Adversaries. Based on reading all of your Makai Kingdom fics, I can see that Salome and Drake have a long and adversarial relationship.

Funniest of all was Drake mistaking Salome’s name for the greeting, “Salaam.” Heh.

And this Raye fan feels like breaking into the Alleluia Chorus right about now. When did you post this? Perfect for breaking me out of my unusually depressed mood. Beautiful, as always.

...What is Drake's species anyway? Anyway...

He's in for it now... I mean, one or the other pissed off, it's bad, but he would live... Both angry at the same time? That's just plain crazy.

I think he may as well write a will for what to do to his remains...

Great chapter. I can't wait to see what happens next.