|Reviews for Hermione's Plan|
| G Fawkes 6/18/13 . chapter 32
(sniff) Done. That was (sniff) really good.
(blowing nose sounds... I am NOT crying! It must be allergies?)
| G Fawkes 6/17/13 . chapter 30
Not the least bit interested in criticizing, mostly just wondering about the 'numbers' involved.
'Hundreds' of inferi- I get, at one seems alot to to also have 'hundreds' more at the ministry? Isn't that too much, even if it's every person they EVER killed, which it isn't because they're always leaving houses full of dead muggle families. So I'm going to think ONE hundred at each location... because Voldy also had to somehow transport them, and nothing has been said about how that's done, just noted that it would take alot of energy (some kind of portal?).
Next, 'hundreds' of harpies seems even less possible (never even heard of a bunch of those, maybe 10 or 12 at a time, max) but when the 'light side' numbers were given, it was ninety students plus a few teachers, plus 'the order' which is about two dozen... so how many kids are on brooms? ten or twelve also? And THEY smoked 'HUNDREDS' of harpies? At ten or twenty to one I would think that was "game over, harpies win!" Again, I'm thinking reduced numbers, even saying 'dozens' is a bit much, but leaves some hope for the good guys.
As to the dragon, I'm glad it wasn't a Horntail. Those are a little over-used and cliche, with Harry's history of them. Sixty feet seems over-done but I don't remember the size of the 'big one' they escaped on in book seven. Of course, if you're talking 20 feet neck, 20 feet body, and 20 feet of tail, yes, it adds up. In my mind, tails don't count. It's all relative... you don't count a horse's tail when measuring, but you would for an alligator.
Still not agreeing with anything EVER in the movies : thinking a dragon can keep up with a firebolt, flapping big, huge scaly wings to climb, no semblance of agility whatsoever, and pulling out of a dive without plowing OR ripping the membranes of the wings? Unh-uh, ain't hapnin'. If the idiots from movie four hadn't completely replaced that scene from the one in the book, you wouldn't even ATTEMPT a dragon / broom chase.
(isn't the firebolt 150 mph straight and 200 in a dive?) I will allow that HAD Harry been required somehow, to use a 'school' broom, and not the fastest broom in the world, then the scene would not favor him.
Ok, on to the finale.
| G Fawkes 6/15/13 . chapter 22
Re: weight of .50 cal. sniper rifles- If Harry carried a trunk full of four rifles under his invisibility cloak he would have had to use a featherweight charm or some form of lightening of that load (ammunition also). So... if you can magically 'lighten' the rifles without damaging them in some way, why not have each team lighten their own weapons during transport (or even shrink it and put in their pocket), then all they would have to struggle with would be the cartridges (probably not a good idea messing with bullets, especially shrinking). Then, once in position, un-shrink the BMG, lock and load, and 'party on'. (on a side note: what about magically 'silencing' the rifles, and what about 'notice me not' or similarly 'cloaked' duck blind-type covering- so bad guys on brooms can't pick off the snipers?)
Hmmmm, been wanting a Remington 700 tactical .308, figured a half mile was good enough, but this sounds fun, too! (maybe a Lapua .338, and split the difference) (northeast Ohio is so flat, I'd have to drive 2 hours to get somewhere hilly enough to practice shooting it. Maybe down near Pittsburg, then anyone in black and yellow would be an 'ok' miss. Baltimore is too far away.)
(really, just kidding- Mr. FBI man, sir)
| G Fawkes 6/15/13 . chapter 20
Not arguing the point, mind you, and I could still give a rats petutti about canon, but I thought the 'official' line on house Bones was- that Edgar Bones was the 'Head of house', and he and his wife were killed at the ancestral home, orphaning Susan. Amelia, Edgar's only sibling, became guardian of Susan and moved into the same mansion. Later, before Scrimgour was elected, Amelia was murdered for being the 'clear' favorite to replace Fudge, and being way too 'light' and also incorruptible, once again leaving Susan alone.
And no, I can't remember which book it was in either.
My one point of contention would be that NOTHING in the movies counts for 'diddly crap', and any source they use might be suspect by association. WAY too many things have become completely bastardized by the movie directors.
| G Fawkes 6/14/13 . chapter 17
Re: a/n#1 ch17- No, saving the Grangers is a good thing... I'm still wishing Molly had died and Arthur would be rid of her. Maybe a bit morbid, but since Percy is gone, can Penny and Charlie hook up ?
Re: #4 Hey, family names are cool, as long as you're not having them 'hot tub' inappropriately with other family named characters... Awkward! You might not be welcome at the next reunion. ( Then again I have some super hot second cousins...)
And finally, I'm wondering about Harry's 'rights of conquest' and taking ownership of the basilisk carcass. I know it's 'been done', but even if he donates all revenue, he should be 'the Decider' (thank you, again, George Bush). McGonagall and Sluggy can fight over ten percent donated to Hogwarts. NO ONE at that school did CRAP to thwart that problem EXCEPT Harry, Ron, and Hermione. They can't even access the room it's in without Harry.
| G Fawkes 6/14/13 . chapter 14
The a/n before ch 14 just shocked me.
I've been actively trying to NOT review so much, thinking 'why would anyone want to see my name there EVERY time they put up a new chapter. Now this is an older fic (06-07), so maybe it doesn't count as much, 'cuz when I finally get around to checking the review page, it'll be nothing but ME for ten in a row or a couple days worth. Even the 'new' or current fics out there, I'm not reviewing every week/month (whenever updated), 'cuz I don't want to rush or nag the author.
Some, of course, seem to ONLY write to gather numbers of reviews (attention seeking whores) . The 'better' writers, I always thought, wrote because THEY needed/wanted to write for THEMSELVES. Like in "Sister Act 2" when the nun told the young girl singer "When you wake up every day, and you can't imagine any other thing BUT to sing- then you ARE a singer".
Now I know I mentioned my 'Mt. Rushmore' of fic writers earlier, and your inclusion... I just didn't ever conceive that the number of reviews in a chapter could persuade /discourage your enthusiasm in one of your stories. At least not to the point of stating-"only 35 this time, maybe they don't like it.
(to sum, F**k THEM, write for YOU!)
| G Fawkes 6/13/13 . chapter 8
Re: a/n's ch8
Along with the similarities to other fics mentioned, there are also quite a few that portray the adult Grangers, and by extension Hermione, as nudists. Where is all THAT coming from?
| G Fawkes 6/13/13 . chapter 6
Re: a/n from ch6-pertaining to wizard v muggle clothing and Fleur's swimwear from the 2nd task.
Being French and assuming she's very well off , it's possible that the Delacours vacation at "all the best places' and mingle with the muggles and other 'it crowd' europeans on the best beaches available. It's therefore possible that she COULD have had a suit like in the movie, and would even be used to wearing 'a whole lot less' like Hermione in this story. (that doesn't mean I don't HATE all the movies)
Also, in a semi-related topic: is anyone else REALLY disappointed with the actors hired to play the roles in those movies? Not to be a 'pig' in the least, but for the descriptions of all Veela in the books, Fleur was BARELY even cute, Cho was waaaaayyyy too plain for her role, Lavender was pretty much disgusting, and even though I hate Ginny with a passion- the books call her VERY attractive, the actress- NOT so much.
I wonder... and it's not exactly 'conspiracy theory' stuff- but since JKR identifies with Hermione admittedly, would she have INSISTED that no one was ALLOWED to be prettier than Emma Watson is (especially at the Ball)? I mean, I love Hermione to death, but wouldn't you think the veela should be just completely smokin' hot? Harry describes Cho as ' the best looking girl in the school', he says Lavender is the 'best of his year', and Ginny the best of hers. (?) Still loving Hermione- but what's up with the casting director?
| G Fawkes 6/13/13 . chapter 1
Are girls REALLY that 'messed up' to believe that from ONE kiss before Christmas, and ONE complete disaster of a date on Valentine's Day., that Harry and Cho were "going together"? That's a bit of a stretch, even for me, someone who's regard for canon would be to burn ALL copies of books six and seven.
(rhetorical question aimed at 'girls', not the author, whom I still have on my "Mt. Rushmore" of fanfic writers)
| Angeline G. McFellou 5/29/13 . chapter 32
I enjoyed the story, it was really fun the way you described and managed the entire training process and struggle.
Congratulations great too strict, very easy to understand what you write.
Loved the fic, congratulations and always remains so even saw, please.
PS: I'm Brazilian, so please disregard the grammar / spelling, because I'm reading / commenting on your fic by Google Translate.
| kyraboo 5/27/13 . chapter 32
A great story. I loved it1
| Guest 5/10/13 . chapter 32
chem pro beast! after reading this story, faith in humanity restored
| Baferious 5/7/13 . chapter 1
I write this review knowing that chem prof will never read it, but I have to say that I think that this is the most profoundly accurate captures of Hermione's mindset late in the series (at least from a HHr shippers POV.)
I think this should be required reading for any starting HHr shippers to which I hope to join soon.
Again, I applaud chem prof in the vein hope he reads this.
| Cyd the Squid 4/16/13 . chapter 32
I really enjoyed this story and will definitely be going to look at some of your others. I thought you did really well in developing your plot throughout the story, being careful not to drop any part of the story lines (and with the number of "side" stories that you had in here, you were careful to wrap them all up). I do want to thank you for not making this a "trio" fic; although, at times those might be appropriate, I didn't feel with the bond that Harry and Hermione had in this story that it would have been.
I loved that you twisted the usual time-traveling stories into something new and exciting and loved how you were able to tell the story, without ever letting the story drag through Hermione's journal.
Also, your wife did an excellent job with the proofreading. I usually find something in stories (both fanfiction and published writing) that is grammatically incorrect as I teach at school, and was pleasantly surprised to find nothing as I was reading!
Great job, and keep up the excellent work!
| Guest 4/12/13 . chapter 22
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