Please update soon^^! I love this story^^!

I love that song. I haven't heard it yet, but I will soon. It's in the new Prince Caspian movie, right? Not the older one?

Aw...Clanker can be so sweet at times. But what about his fire? Make him joke around a bit more. Make him do something sweet/joke on Kate that'll leave them both laughing their butts off. Up-date soon, please!! ^__^

Jones willing himself into a resigned, albeit sour, state of resistence is fitting with his character. He possesses so much control over others around him, I'd find it hard to believe that he would not first force himself to display the same level. Just shows how strong the remainder of his moral center is. :)

"There are no such things as dreams on the Dutchman"... oh, too true. Nightmares, more like, though hopefully Su'ri won't find herself caught in one for too long. ~.^

Well, well. The Captain is keeping a tight leash on his latest acquisition. That'll be incredibly hard on the sisters, keeping them separate from each other. I wonder, how will he enforce it when the ship is only so big...? *curious look*

Another interesting clash of emotions within Jones, his perpetual anger and resentment at Calypso leaving him - countering against his personal ethics and sense of honor, not to mention common sense. How you portray Jones' personal struggle with himself is really well-done. d^.^b

Very happy I finally managed to review this. Bravo!
Keep writing, I'll keep reading. soupie ~.^

ya poor girl, i LOVE this story and can't wait for more update soon

Poor girl. Captain Davy Jones won't hurt her, though. He's too honorable.

I finally get to review here. XD You know I'm enjoying your story and am looking forward to more of Klanker! Keep up the good work mate!

Another terrific chapter. ^_^

I like the way you lay out the Lion-and-Lamb scenario between DJ and Cerulean. He's a crusty, wounded old barstid, a misogynist for sure. But her beauty and innocence still touch his far-absent heart somehow.

I can see some crucial differences in the way you write DJ from the way I have been doing, and they are vast improvements over my fumbling attempts. I may be forced to rename my guy "Captain Nemo". ~_^

This chapter does suffer here and there from lapses of clarity or grammar, probably because it is so new. In a couple of places that results in missed story-telling opportunities.

For instance, the first paragraph is ultra-important in setting the scene, and contrasting the atmosphere surrounding the two pairings. Kate and Clanker in their dark and stuffy little compartment are warmed by their love and breathing sunshine and wildflowers. DJ and Cerulean are marinating in a dank and dark, drippy space, redolent of domination, pain and loneliness. I believe that if you would rework the sentences in that paragraph, breaking up some of the longer ones and fleshing out the thoughts in some of the others, it would be far more cogent and powerful.

Another instance of a missed opportunity is the passing mention of the mark on Cerulean's arm.

“I thought as much” she said softly slipping out of the bed stiffly she stood there a moment moving her right arm it felt sore and tight, she must have slept on it wrong, and she assumed that and the mark binding her to the ship.

“and she assumed that and the mark binding her to the ship” – this seems to be crucial, but what you meant by it is unclear. Suggest breaking up the sentence & expanding on the mark – it’s the one DJ put on her, is it not? Could use some mystical explanation, etc..

I love your writing. Do keep it up. d^_^b

This is a great chapter. ~_^

They get far enough along in their growing trust of each other to share the traumatic experiences that have shaped them. A big milestone in any relationship.

Your writing style is smoothing out nicely. You seem to have proof-read this one much more carefully than some of the earlier ones. The sentence structure and punctuation are all there, and they do help the reader absorb your tale SO much more readily. *appreciative grin*

You are growing as an author, my dear, and it is straight and true.

This was hilarious. ^_^

The last part of the dialog between Kate and Hadras was a little chancy, treading well out onto the crumbly margins of "Is she laughing with him or at him?" But it worked.

Under the heading of “More Salubrious Phraseology”:

“I aint gonna hurt ye mate ye ken trust me I promise I wont bite ye,” she said sitting down on her rear criss cross.

Sitting down “tailor-fashion” would work in that era.

Poor girl! Why is it that men think they can do whatever damn well they please?!?! Pieces of shit, is what they are!! In some cultures, (way in the olden days,) women where respected and sometimes even slightly worshipped because women bring life into this world! Now, males only think of us as a way to pleasure themselves! DAMN YOU ALL TO DAVY JONES LOCKER!

Okay, I'm done with my ranting. Up-date soon, please!! (unlike last time.) :)

Yippee! *squees* I've been waiting for this! ^.^

First of all, I'm really glad you updated. :D Secondly, I really liked the opening line. Thirdly, we finally got a taste of Clanker's and Kate's past. Which was tragic and horrible (for both of them) but I really liked how you sort of wove the two together. Thomas Brian... *smiles* Nice name. Huggable. ^.^

Really enjoying this, as always.
Keep writing, I'll keep reading. soupie ~.^

Oh, such a sweet chapter. Keep up the good work.

Really interesting plot twist. ^_^

BTW, "profitable acquirement" might be happier as "profitable acquisition"

You sure can tell a story...

Cliff-hanger?

Well, maybe it's more like foreshadowing. ^_^

Good game.