nice start. Im exited.

Nice. Very well written. Not a lot of dialog, but somehow it fits. I liked it. Hope to see more!
~AC
ps. would you care to help a review starved authoress out and check out her story? Please? lol

I don't exactly know what it is about this... but I love it. Very realistic, and just... very, very good. Adding to favorites immediately, and I'm sure I'll read it again.

Thanks for sharing this!