look, I know your only 11 and all but you could try and make it sound more like real life, the sotrylines are great but u need to take your time and write with more detail. If you read one of my fics, Songs Of Love, Just Friends, Is It Really You, you will know what I mean, have a look at one of them and don't worry about the storylines just see the detail and maybe you could learn a bit. Look, I know my fic, Martha and Jack isnj't the nest thing, and my other's I started writing when I was 8 so they suck as well, but I've grown as an author and so will you.

I'm not trying to be rude...

do you have myspace?

Jess xoxo

really awesome update soon

omg update soon this is soo good i love it it great update soon plz

ok, well, I luv it but I feel so sorry 4 Cassie, Im a Cassie/Ric shipper so yeah, hope they get 2gether!

Jess xoxo

This is a great story. please write more!

really good wana know wat happens nxt so update soon please

lol. I couldn't help but laugh when Maddie said that then. Poor Cassie. Although I'm a Ric/Maddie shipper so I like the story!

4 any1 else reading this this isnt the author of the sotry its her cousin... anyway great story lei:):):):):)