Really interesting first chapter! I have to say I enjoyed the style, something different to what I'm used to! I shall read on!

alright i have to admit i've been putting off reading this last chapter because i've seen that you haven't really updated since october, which is really sad because this is so wonderful, and I didn't want to get to caught up into it. I do hope you haven't given up on this story. Because Mirayle seems like such an amazing character, and her story is wonderfull.

this is completely brilliant and I hope you do update soon!!

I think Mirayle did extremely well for her first time with the bells. I was wondering how she was going to hold the bells with two swords. I guess she's just going to have to get used to holding just one sword in her hands. But I'm glad that the Clyar have seen that Mirayle is the right person for the bells. I just wish that Susellen didn't have to turn her back on them.

Your story is coming into effect, and I find myself excited to see what happens next.

I love Sam and Aletta. I've never read LOTR [i've seen parts of the movies though] but I do like the cross over you've done, I think it's mostly to do with the fact that you didn't use major character. Mogget will always be one of my favorite characters and you've captured him extremely well. Young Sam is a tough one. and I guess that does come with having to take care of three younger siblings. the poor thing.

I'm wondering whats going on with Sabriel and Lirael. Are they under attack together? The kids have soo much trouble put on their shoulders, but then again when their parents were around their age a lot happened to them as well.

Amazing chapter!! I'm off to read the next one.

I LOVE the references you made to The Five Great Charters. Thats actually one of my favorite Old Kingdon Fan fics.

I do feel a little bit bad for Mhor's. How was he transported to the Old kingdom I wonder...I guess I'll just have to kep on reading to find out.

I love Mirayle. She so young, and she basically does have the world on her shoulders, but she is handling it extremely well.

So Filris is afraid of death? For some reason I always thought that the Abhorsen line didn't fear death, but I think it's got more to due with Susellen telling her younger sisters about death and the things she has read and seen, I think that would scare anyone far far far away from death.

Wonderfully written chapter!

Go Mirayle!! I absolutely love her!
You know for some reason I thought Susellen was the middle child. I had to go and re-read the first chapter and I figured out that she was actually the oldest. so I wonder do all of them have the death sense? Filris is a rememberancer, that means she goes into death...

oh and Prince Sameth's daughter! Their goes my hope of him marrying a Clyar and having an unstopable child.haha. But then again I could be wrong. Alright I'm off to read the next chapter!

Maybe Susellen has the gift of prophecy? and She knew she wasn't supposed to have the bells. Sigh. I'm so wrapped up in your story that I've thrown off m studying. It is so wonderful, I don't think I can say that enough, but it is, and I just wanted to tell you that.

Oh I hope Edward's not a bad guy. Granted he seems like a jerk, but that would just suck.
btw I love that you had a male clayr as the messenger.
Mirayle will make an amazing abhorsen one day. I can just feel it. haha

Wonderful chapter!

Oh damn. Mirayle's got some fire in her.
She kind of is royalty. Not really per say, but mostly because she's got Clyar and Abhorsen Blood running through her veins.

Can you imagine if Sam married a Clyar, their would probably be unstoppable...having all the bloodlines running through their veins, and even the chance of being a wallmaker...well now i've gone off topic.

But this was an amazing chapter. Mirayle is an amazing character! And I can't wait to see where you take her.

Susellen reminds me of Elliemere so determined, and a bit like Sam in Lirael, so much pressure on her I do feel a bit sorry for her, mostly because I don't think she really is supposed to be the future Abhorsen.
Wonderfully Written Chapter!
Poor Mirayle. Sixteen years old and the worlds being thrown on your shoulders.

Oh no! Thats so sad. I quite like Mirayle. She has that spunk of Lirael and Sabriel. I think she will make an amazing abhorsen one day!
I wonder what Lirael's going to think about Susellen. That's probably going to break her heart a little bit.

I just found your fic, and I love it already. I always pictured Lirael having daughters. I think it has to due with the Clayr's blood that she has.

Mirayle seems like an interesting character! and I can't wait to read more about her!

If you're apologizing for this chapter being late, then I must really apologize for this review being late. In all frankness, I'm more of a fanfic writer than a reader, and so I had to struggle through chapter 50 of FGC before anything else. Hence this very, very, VERY late review. I also see that you haven't posted chapter 26 yet, but I can't fault you for that given my own horrible updating practices.

I enjoyed the soldiers-around-the-campfire scene. The description of Mirayle and Levin setting up camp shows that they're getting accustomed to working together. Mirayle as usual can't control her babble, but we love her for it! There were some grammar errors and run on sentences here, but nothing too distracting. (There's my nitpicking again!)

Mirayle's waking up was hilarious; poor Emrys! But he seems a jolly forgiving sort anyway. The transition from the watch with Emrys to the morning journey could have used a bit of explication to separate the two times a bit more. The "figure of speech" comment was priceless. And the possessed child was one of the most frightening things I've ever imagined, especially the eyes. Why do children always creep me out in horror movies? Innocence gone bad, I guess! The pursuit was very exciting, and I love how Mirayle just took control of the situation without really knowing just what she was doing. All very in-character for her.

Poor vain Legolas. With Aletta around now he'll probably spend half his time in the bath.

As usual, I appreciated the references to established Nix characters (Sam the elder), and the mention of the twins was intriguing too. I like how you don't give everything away at once and just mention details as they come up. And Sam's reaction to Minas Tirith? Pure gold!

I'm interested to see how this all plays out, especially with Mirayle in a new situation.

-Sanaryelle

Please, Please update this! It is brilliant!

I will start off bluntly so you can get into the mood for reading this story, because for sure this is a change from my normal reviews, because this chapter was a serious dissapointment from where I look from.

I higlighted a few of the problems that linger in this chapter such as the changing personality of Mirayle in my previous review, however the chief problems here were a sense of rush.

The whole fight scene with the daemon-child was a possibillity for an excellent fight scene, but in the same sort of way that Sam the Younger's fight with the Free Magic creature had touches of the way it was over too soon, the combat scene was sloppily done, and had no sort of essence.

Even if the child-beast is a very powerful Free Magic creature, and you seemed to get the idea across when the transformation began (I've seen the sort of thing done before in other stories, the change of human shell to daemon was a high point, I'll give you that.), the actual combat seemed poorly done. I would have tried to draw it out longer, even if it was difficult for the warriors involved, they would at least try a fighting retreat rather than a scrambling run away. Also, on the part of character, it was a poor show of leadership of an Abhorsen-in-waiting-in-waiting, though Mirayle doesn't seem concerned about that.

In addition, the entry into the castle seemed too Deus Ex Machina for my liking - how she 'happened' to know of the entrance within the bushes. You could have mentioned that it was because of previous experience of sneaking around castles that she knew about these secret passages - and where was the description for the guard-sending?

The other thing that jarred with me horribly was the use of enormous chunks of words in the second part of the chapter, during Mirayle and Emrys' watch. It needs to be broken up a lot more, even if there isn't a new person speaking it just looks more appealing to have it as lesser portions.

I do apologise for the brusqueness of this review, particularly after you were so very good-tempered after a prolonged absence, but you did say to keep reading and reviewing, but I was very, very disheartened by this last chapter, and I think it could do with a lot of work. I'm sure you can pull it off, just take your time. Despite what everyone else says, we do have a sense of patience as reviewers, and are happier to wait for a good chapter than have a slapdash one in no time at all.

Keep writing

-Stinger

Amazing! I have no other words to describe it! Amazing and I look forward to much more!