  Crazy Lyoko Girl
2008-08-22 . chapter 3 Why do you have to remove the story. Just because you won't continue the story doesn't mean you have to get rid of it. I really like it and if I had an account I would totally take over this story. But I don;t have an account and I don't have time to write this story, but maybe I can give you ideas to continue the story. Just please don't remove the story. I'll give you an idea right now.
So Yumi's dead, and it's because Xana possesed Aelita and tried to destroy the sector. So how about Ulrich blames Aelita because of Aelita's death and he refuses to forgive Aelita, which makes Jeremy mad. And Odd's left in the middle, but doesn't know whwo to go with, he does miss Yumi and can understand why Ulrich's mad at Aelita and he can also see why Jeremy's mad at Ulrich, but because lyoko still's active he decides to stay with Jeremy and Aelita. And William's also mad that Yumi's dead, and like Ulrich is also mad at Aelita. So he and Ulrich leave the group, but he and Ulrich still aren't the best of friends. Jeremy, Aelita, and Odd eventually tell Yumi's parents and brother that her heart some how just stopped beating. They believe it, and all take it pretty hard especially Heroki. Ulrich refuses to talk to the others, and all he does is sit in his room mourning over Yumi, but one day Heroki comes by asking the real reason to how his sister died. Ulrich tries to convince Heroki she's dead becacause of her heart, but he doesn't believe it. So eventually Ulrich gives in and brings Heroki to the factory, showing him Lyoko and all that stuff. He askes Ulrich to show him exactly where his sister died. But not knowing how to work the super computer he shows Heroki the scanner that Yumi was in. He explained everything about that trip to Lyoko. But while he's explaining to Heroki, Aelita and Odd walk into the room, shocked to see Ulrich and Heroki. Asking what they are doing here and a quick responce from Ulrich they say that Xana's attacking, but before Aelita can finish, Heroki say's that he want's to go. That he want's to go see what his sister use to do. Knowing that it wasn't fair to say no to Heroki Aelita quickly agree's to let him go to Lyoko. Jeremy hearing all of this, dissagree's with Aelita, saying that it's to dangerous, and all that stuff, but after the debating, he finally agree's to let Heroki to go to Lyoko.
If you need any more of an idea just ask, or if you want another idea, just post another note saying give me another idea or morer ideas. Just please, don't delete this story, it's one of the best ones you wrote. You can't delete this. Please, don't delete this. You can't, it's just to good.
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  AeonFrodo
2007-11-16 . chapter 2Wow, this is a great fic.
However, you know these three dots ... That's an ellipsis, and that is meant to be a pause in the sentance. I'm afraid in chapter 2 there was an incorrect use of one, because they are never used at the end of the sentance.
But other than that, a very good fic. I hope you continue this. And personally, I hope Yumi survives. |
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