While your writing style is decent, I must let you know that you have created a Mary-Sue (come on- brilliant, talented, political power, a demon, special ring, blah blah blah etc)

Also, the characters are out of character. Kurama is much more confident and less expressive than you make him, and for a high level demon who doesn't put up with anything, Hiei would never be bossed around by a bunch of maids. But maybe that was your attempt at humor...

PS- actual fan girls is a sign of a real amateur writer

God its been a long time since weve writen.

W00T! go sheer! update soon? pwease? lol Great story by the way!

rei

I like it update soon