 Ri2 2009-09-05 . chapter 7Sorry it took so long for me to get to this. I've been busy. You too?
Dibbers! How're you hanging?
The Professor is dead?! NO! How will we survive without him?!
Well Dib, it's all your fault. The Heartless wouldn't have come if you hadn't LET THEM, you idiot.
Wuya's a morrigan?
ALL YOUR FAULT. ALL YOUR FAULT. ALL YOUR...oh, I'm not helping, am I?
Dib, I'd have thought you of all people would know NEVER MAKE DEALS WITH EVIL PEOPLE EVEN FOR GOOD REASONS.
Yeah, lots of evil plans are dumb, aren't they?
Lyle sucks.
How DID Zim get it? Oh, right, Dib went dark, so it had to choose somebody else. He just happened to be standing nearby.
Nobody remembers Ron's name. The poor boy.
Calvin's living a lie? Wait, what did Calvin's dad due to Hobbes's family?!
Wuya's enjoying this.
Good old Hollow Bastion!
Inspired by Dr. Tarantulas' lab?
Hey, Venom! Or ex-Venom.
Nightcrawler? What, you can't teleport out? Oh, guess not.
I have no idea who the next guy is.
Hey, is that the wolf from Fables?
Bumblebee? How'd you get here and why are you unstable?
Founders? What did they found?
So...who died?
Yeah, nametags help.
A sewing alchemist?
Monger? No, that can't be him! It must be a homonculus or body double he left in his place and he broke out ages ago without anyone noticing.
Tucker? As in Foley?!
Wuya is mean.
What does make a hero?
Wow, there's worse things than her out there? Yikes.
Azula. How...nice to see you again.
Alucard? That vampire hunter who is himself a vampire? Wow, you've got him VERY secure.
I think he's just screwing around. Alucard has no fear of the likes of them.
Lyle's bi?
Alucard is actually Dracula, right?
I wonder...could he break out any time he wanted, and is complying only to play with them?
Yay! Mind rape Azula!
Wait. She...drove him out?! Whoa.
Um, Azula, he doesn't really mind burning.
Yeah, Lyle's...strange.
Please, Alucard has better standards!
Nice symbol.
So what's behind the door? This her most secure prisoner?
Monkeys! Covered in blood!
That was AWESOME! XDXDXDXD Sweet door.
A laboratory, were things are done FOR SCIENCE!
It's the Venom symbiote! Almost thought it was a Heartless at first.
Aw, it wants Eddie. Too bad.
Wuya killed Professor X?!
And she's enjoying this misery. **.
They're working on lots of projects other than Heartless here, huh?
Growltiger?
That a werewolf?
Paper tigers? That is a good one.
Hmm? There's another, possibly good organization? Er, that's good, right?
What rebellion did Garfield defeat?
You're the one who hurt Kim?! You **!
Pre-plan-plan?
JOKER! I knew it was you when they mentioned the purple and hair! You fit right in here, don't you?
Deidara? Who's that?
Good god. He and Lyle really are a pair, huh?
Yep, masterminds are always surrounded by morons.
So, where's Batman?
The Red whatsit?
Those auras sound right, but...what's inside Joker?
Clown makeup? Uh...Oo
Paint guns...oh dear. XDXDXD A man eating toilet! XDXDXD
I agree, Lyle's right about most TV these days.
Cheese tastes blue, obviously!
That's a lot of piercings.
Wow, Wuya certainly does a lot to bring in the extra moolah, huh?
Oh, Oddworld? I know that place. Vaguely.
The hyenas?!
Hmm. What hit their world? Jak? How'd he get there?
Ottsel, not otter weasel.
Is Jak supposed to be the Beast here?
Smash Brothers!
A new world's coming? What?
Thugs-4-less? This mean we're gonna see Ratchet and Clank soon? But who's the angel?
Who is his brother?
Discworld's h ere too?
Azula's terrifying.
XD Joker's awesome. Hey, how'd he get Two-face's coin?
XDXDXD Groin attack!
Kevin? Ugh, I've gotten rather sick of Ben 10.
Joker's argument is the same reason my Dad thinks exercise is bad for you.
Why was there a squid there?
Is Amestris from FMA? Yes, it is.
They should have just asked Nicolas Flamel how he made his stone, I doubt it was nearly as difficult. Or required as many deaths.
The Joker is hilarious.
I don't really care about alchemy either.
Wow. Kimblee is a dick.
Exposition is fun.
Hojo!
Hi Kevin. Guess you're not gonna make it to Alien Force, huh?
Oh, Kevin ate his mom? Or did someone else?
Why DOES his hair stick?
I'm starting to feel a little sorry for Kevin, but I've never been very fond of him.
Hmm? What's that voice in his head? Ghostfreak? Something else? Yes, it is! Yay!
And now Kevin's going to be even crazier. Great.
Glad to see he likes his new body. I think.
Joker can portal?! Who gave him that power?! Like he wasn't dangerous enough...
Um..wtf? Is Azula into him? Oo
Is this the Heartless manufactory then?
Who's the culture-conscious alien?
It has no mouth yet it must scream!
Cousin It?
Bob is funny.
Oh, not Tucker Foley then.
What is this guy?
Bad voice, huh?
Uh oh. What are they going to do to Dib?
Why is Tucker feeling uncertain about this considering everything else he's done?
Ew, and Lyle's hitting on Kimblee too? Gross.
What emotion is Kimblee feeling?
Oh, you killed someone from Twilight? Good.
Azula's been on the battlefield, hasn't she?
Oh great. What's the dark secret of Traverse Town?
Reed Richards? Stargates?!
It's...alive?!
Masticate? Oh good, I thought he said something worse.
A stinger? Yeah, that and claw sounds like evil.
Who are these guys? |
 Night-Owl08 2009-07-24 . chapter 7All right! I'm so excited to see a new chapter up! In fact, in celebration I'm going to read the whole story again to jog my memory. =D
I'm impressed at the way you presented the villains of the story, delving into the very psychology of their evil in a way that made them seem not only legitimately dangerous but also interesting. Did make it a bit tough going - because of the duration, what with all the dark stuff going on. It was impressive, but I didn't wanna spend over-long in that place.
With all the familiar characters in this chapter, I was alternately happy and sad. Still, awesome -- Jak'n'Daxter exist here! This lab's rife with opportunities for KH-universe backstories and origins, huh? And looks like Tucker's found a home away from home. (speaking of which, I think you're using aspects from both the anime and the manga?)
KIMBLEE. Things are gonna get bloody, aren't they! I think I'm worried for the main characters. No way he gets involved without someone(s) dying.
There is a little suggestion I have, if you're open to critique. Your chapters tend to be epic-ly long, enough that it's pretty easy to get lost in them. I guess it's hard to cut them down, but have you thought about posting them in two halves, or something?
I'm looking forward to the next chapter and getting back to Zim and the others, whenever that may be. Thanks for giving us more! |
 Lt. Commander Richie 2009-07-18 . chapter 7Why is the robot-man striking me as an eloquent Skidz?
And I think I love you for updating this. Though I hated you for about six or seven paragraphs after Bumblebee. Still, this is sheer win. I remember all of this particular work up to the last chapter, despite not having touched it since probably about a week after you last updated. That's how long this has stuck with me.
Bravo. I tip my hat to you! If I could add this to my favorites a second time I would! I'll click the box again just for posterity's sake, though. |
 Plutos 2009-07-16 . chapter 7About time you updated, also yay you killed Twilight... Oh ya good chapter. |
 Echo the Ethereal Swordmaster 2009-07-16 . chapter 7Holy (beep)!
I thought you were gone forever and will never come back?!
Damn, took you long enough! Finally a new update! MAN! Must. Know. What. Happens. NEXT!
UPDATE SOON! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK THERE! |
 Night-Owl08 2008-12-24 . chapter 6Zim, Calvin and Hobbes. Well, if there's one thing Kingdom Hearts itself has taught us, it's that the least expected combinations make the best story!
I very much like 'Kingdom Crossovers'; even the dream sequence interested me and believe me, THAT says something. Seriously, it's funny (oxymoron?) and there's plenty of originality despite the recogniseable parallels with Kingdom Hearts.
It's a delight to see such a wide array of familiar characters with such detail given to them in character, backstory and inclusion in the story, coming from so many different sources and yet coexisting quite well. Even the unfamiliar characters are growing on me despite being unable to identify what they're from (like Spike).
I've recognised some of the references in your dialogue, such as 'He just put my kid through college!' And even though I never watched an episode of Inuyasha, "Sit boy!" wasn't lost on me either.
It seems that you haven't updated for over a year, but I sincerely hope that doesn't mean you've lost interest in this story. I mean, you seemed to have plans for future chapters, last I read - and I'd assume that you would've given some kind of indication if you'd left the site permanently... eh, don't mind me! I'm not trying to nag, I just care about what'll happen next!
Oh! Also. About the category: I reckon if it's attention and feedback you want, the KH section is the way to go; since KH is sort of a crossover anyway... it sort of fits either way. |
 Plutos 2008-11-01 . chapter 6Nice love the plot typing with one hand is hard |
 Echo the Ethereal Swordmaster 2008-10-21 . chapter 6GENIUS! IT'S GENIUS! Man, I wish you update soon. |
 Coonass 2008-09-08 . chapter 6Why this doesn't have many more reviews, I don't know. This is absolutely amazing. |
 The Plot Master 2008-09-06 . chapter 6Where has this fic been all my life?
Alright, time to actually review. I've read this story four times over, and it's still my favorite. At times, I rank it higher than the game Kingdom Hearts, though that's probably becuase books will always be better than games.
The first chapter was amazing. You managed to kick off the dream sequence, and give background at the same time. No easy feat. You also took The Awakening and made it several times better. The average KH reteller would have simply copy-pasted the starting cinematic/tutorial.
Also, you get bonus points for the effective use of Nicktoons. I'm far from a fan of the stuff, but you pulled it off. The mix of references and plot devices worked like a charm.
Love what you did with Zim. He's finally a charecter, instead of a cartoon. That, and it's fun to picture him with a keyblade. Almost as fun as Gir hugging a Shadow.
You get super bonus points for Calvin and Hobbes. Nice job there. Great Donald and Goofy replacement. You also managed to make them KH appropriate. I'd give you points for Morty, but I've never played his game. King Garfield was a good idea too. The comic kingdom is amazing.
I could go on and on about those bits, but I feel the need to move on.
Traverse Town. Best rendition I've seen. It even tops the game version. It's more of a town, less of a room. Bonus points for Spike, the Elrics, and Cyborg.
The entire feel of Traverse Town was great. You had charecters and references from dozens of fandoms, and managed to make them all beliveable. Their wardrobe changes only helped to make them more KH appropriate.
Also, putting in so many fandoms made the heartless seem like a real threat. You can now picture some of the worlds they've taken, therefore giving them a much bigger impact.
You've pulled off a spectacular mix of comedy and adventure, and I will always love this piece.
Alas, I have to give some negativity. Glowing reviews only help so much.
The story could get a little too random at times, and was rather distracting. It worked with Nny in the dream sequence, but had no real place afterward. However, this is Zim, so it's mainly excuseable.
Bloo was annoying, but that's just my opinion. You can ignore that.
Some scenes from Traverse Town need a bit of clipping. Introducing so many fandoms was a great idea, as stated above. However, some bits just did not need to be there, ie, the construction site or the game of fetch.
I'd talk about the long descriptions of clothing and charecters, but that would be hypocritical. This pot does not intend to call the kettle black.
Hobbes was a little too free with his hands. I'd like to see a bit less of him slapping the others around. Same goes for Calvin, though to a lesser extent.
There. Now that that's over with, I can get back to praise.
HKV, you are a mastermind. This is, without a doubt, the best fanfiction I have ever seen. Please, please, please add more. There is very little left on this site that is half as good as this.
Thank you, and have a nice day.
PS
Did I see Freddy Kruger, or were my eyes playing tricks on me? |
 Lt. Commander Richie 2007-12-29 . chapter 6Hm, great job so far. The chapters are a bit long, but that may just be because my screen is extremely out of whack. Either way, this is really great. If you really think you should, you could move this to Kingdom Hearts. It's not really a crossover so much as it is a retelling of KH with different characters, so it fits just fine. All the basic elements are there. |
 Ri2 2007-10-21 . chapter 6Wow. Yet another nice opening poem. I missed those.
Got stressful, not gotstressful.
They got a room? Yay, but what happened?
God, Zim’s so…serious and depressed…the poor little guy. Now I’m worried about Gir too.
Punishments for crimes, not punishments or crimes.
Calvin’s creepy.
Hey, where’s Morte?
You said mindless coalition, bound together, and blind stupidity twice.
Well, at least the mob hasn’t attacked yet.
XD Um, is Abel feminine?
Bacon?
Hey, it’s Zaphod!
Jackets? Neat, where can I get one?
BONNIE! Evil incarnate…well, not really, but still!
Zim did all that? Go Zim!
Zim’s scary.
Hobbes has killed that many vampires? Impressive.
Stephen Townsend? What’d he do again?
Poor Ron. His whole world is lost. Well, at least he still has KP, and Rufus.
Chief? Who’s Morte talking about?
Go Calvin! Why doesn’t he do something like that more often?
Wow. Very impressive door spell. How’d Calvin seal it, though?
Jarod has a strong focus. And Dojo looks cute in that outfit.
Butterflies? Pez senses?
Carnivorous bacon?
Spike ate a Nazi? What’d it taste like?
Hey, Hobbes and Rufus know each other from an MMORPG? Wow, how often does that happen in real life?
Are Brain and Pinky part of this group of intelligent lab rats?
Where would the headless chicken get its blades?
Rufus is not a meerkat! Stupid pale-skinned Aryan goblinoid.
NACHOS!
Who’s Bingo?
Spike is dangerous.
Nice room. Whose is it?
Hi Minimoose! How’s your date going?
Do the others notice Zim talking to his moose?
Zim, what do you know about mating? You don’t exactly have a girlfriend…
Ron’s normal? He has a monkey tail, KP, in case you hadn’t noticed.
Ah, Hobbes, you’re awesome. You love doing that to Calvin, don’t you?
Whoa, and Zim did it to Hobbes without Hobbes knowing?! Impossible!
What makes Zim think Abel’s familiar?
Abel’s been around for over fifty years?! He seems so young…er. Than that, I mean.
Kim and Ron have been here that long? Jeez…this is horrible.
Should be ‘someone who’s had experience with this’, not someone who’s experienced. I think.
My God, they have met each other before?! Incredible!
He wanted to see what it was like to be blind? Um, why?
Oh, so that’s where Zim met Aang, too?
XD Oh, Abel. You’re hilarious. Hit by a hover train.
Great observation, Ron. You’re almost breaking the fourth wall.
Ron, stop angsting. Now.
Mr. Lyle? Um…I’m guessing he’s a bad guy.
How is he doing that?! The, the gravity thing…
Everything about you people, not everythingabout.
Huh? Subject? Kim? Dirty secret? What’s Lyle talking about?
I’m guessing we’re going to run into Cain eventually too.
Hobbes? Race traitor? This is interesting…
Oh, Morte was part of a tower of lying heads? Neat. How’d he get out?
I really don’t like Lyle.
Nice entrance for the Heartless. How’d he rig his card to do that?
‘Fight they can’t win?’ Those don’t look like a particularly tough bunch of Heartless, in my opinion.
Are they going to kill Lyle later? Please say they do. I love it when horrible people with twisted worldviews like that get proven totally, completely wrong.
Morte, why’d you say you’d take out whatever’s left if you don’t think you’re any good against the Heartless?
Why did Abel stuff Morte in the oddly deep cross?
Nice weapons.
Hobbes, Kim’s taken, don’t hit on her.
Of course Hobbes knows the basics of war, Zim. You didn’t know that?
Wow. Nice sword, monkey-boy!
Why’s Ron owe Kim a soda?
Finally, they’re fighting!
Nice bomb, Calvin.
This is a very good fight. And I like Zim’s ‘boarding’.
Calvin, you’re ripping off Iceman.
O…kay, glad to see Ron and Zim are getting along so well. Heheh.
Oh, Spike! I forgot about you.
WILT! Good to see you, buddy!
Rufus can glow?
XD Spike’s plan was brilliant. Levery. There probably is a Friend called Levery, too.
Stop apologizing, Wilt.
Matter-negative? Nice ride.
Nice arm-regeneration sequence.
Ron, your sword is AWESOME.
Wow, a Soldier with a Nocturne as a gun? That’s pretty cool too.
Hmm. Is Ron channeling the skills of past…monkey-dudes? Sort of like Aang?
Caught, not caughting, one of the structure’s outlying spurs.
Was Ron joking with the watch thing, or was he being serious?
Hobbes, careful, remember that curiosity killed the cat. Supposedly.
Huh, I was expecting them to cut down the chandelier. That usually happens.
Ron can morph the sword using his imagination. Interesting.
Flip…flip…flip…I can’t stop watching…flip…flip…
Oh no…not swordchucks…
I hope Ron and Kim don’t turn out like Lilith either, Abel.
Poor Spike.
Anderson?
Abel, why’d you use Ron as a target?
Wow. Spike is very strong.
Huh. That’s it?
Damn, he’s back.
You idiot, don’t insult his poetry!
YAY! Spike’s torturing Lyle!
Bordering on omniscient, not boredom.
The hand thing is creepy. But I’m very glad Spike can still kick his **.
No, Abel!
Dude. That was…whoa. Didn’t know he could do that.
Actually, Dib enjoyed the simulation Zim put him through…
Nice cross.
Abel, please just kill him already!
Oh good, Morte’s back.
What’s a Zeppo?
Ron is not useless.
Jarod! Hi!
Oh Ron…you’re very lovable, you know that?
Bad poem, Jarod.
Sandworm cult? Like in Dune?
I hate Lyle too! Can I join the club, guys?
That’s right, Zim. Things change. And Lyle has lost. Can we kill him now?
Ugh. Figures. He got away.
Oy, Zim and his idioms…stop attacking that poor pillar, what’d it ever do to you?
Cutters. Cool.
Nice ship, Jarod.
Chief? Nameless One? Morte, how do you know Jarod?
So you’re leaving Danny and Aang behind, Zim? Eh, okay.
Whoahoa! Spike, you’re in trouble!
Why’s Jarod being so…kissing-up to Zim?
XD A priest who likes alternative rock. I like this guy.
Foster’s rocks. The house, I mean.
I blame Bloo. Or Cheese.
Great, so bad guys wound up in this place too…
Poor Abel, all lost and alone…and eating lint. Yuck.
Kim, stop being self-conscious already and just explain the sitch.
They certainly can do anything. They’re that good.
Yes, Calvin and Hobbes are brothers just like…Roxas and Sora, I guess.
How’d Kimiko know where Abel was?
Plumbers? As in Mario or Ben 10?
Where does Ron sleep in the Possible house, exactly?
Sewer crocs? Awesome!
Foster’s is so weird…
Hmm, so Bloo set up cameras? Great, it’s Big Brother…both the 1984 one and the reality show.
Iskoort? I know those guys!
Oy…these guys REALLY need someone with a good sense of direction.
Paddleball…PADDLEBALL…
That’s a lot of sodas.
Nice summation of the Avatar storyline. Huh, what did happen to his world?
Yes Kim, it’s a very good thing. Except you can’t manipulate water. Well, nobody’s perfect, not even you.
DRASTICNESS! MUHAHAHAHAHA!
Morte, you talk too much.
Spike likes Ron and Kim? Huh, has a nice way of showing it.
SPLEEN!
What’s the gray laboratory? Drakken? Didn’t think he had it in him to do something like this…
Ron, quit it.
Hmm. What was Lyle up to? Observing their fighting style?
XD Legally-minded war machines. I love it. And Calvin.
Huh. That’s all you wanted to say, Kim? Was expecting more.
Ron has a fanclub? Of one? Oy.
XD Bon-diggity!
Aw, poor Ronnie.
Opus is in charge of money?! That fat thing?! He’s PRIME MINISTER?! How’d that happen?
The Returners? I think a rebel group already copyrighted that name.
Turlingdromes!
Um…okay, that was an odd dream. What did he take those lobsters and chainsaw panda things from?
Gerbil!
So that’s how much wood…fascinating.
Bloo has money?!
They’re electing a pope for town? Cool, I can just see it now…Pope Abel…
So Jarod’s a good guy. At least we know that for sure.
Practice is a good thing, Zim.
It’s Dib! Wonderful place you’ve found, here.
Apocalyptic!
Dib, you’re the stupid one. Zim wasn’t being paranoid, there was something wrong with that stuff.
Hmm? Disappearances every fifty years? How odd. What’s responsible for it?
WUYA!
Vael?
I see. So Dib’s found…End of the World.
And so Dib begins his descent into darkness. Nothing good can come of this.
So, they FINALLY leaving town next chapter?
And I think this story should remain in X-Overs, but that’s just me. Not enough Kingdom Hearts in it, even if that’s what it’s based off of. |
 ri2 2007-08-20 . chapter 5 Hi. I wrote a nice big long review commenting on all the neat stuff in this chapter, but then something screwed up and I lost it all.
So, let me just say simply that the chapter was lots of fun. I'm wondering how Ron became a monkey and who all those people Zim ** off were...and who exactly this Abel guy is.
Also, I felt they spent a bit too much time in the basement, and am wondering why they haven't left for the next world yet. I mean, other than the ship being broken, I mean. Cyborg's shop is cool, btw.
How did Zim get on fire, exactly? |
 RoseofPhilly410 2007-08-14 . chapter 5 Wow, they spent a whole chapter not knowing where they hell they were going. Bless their crazy lil hearts. XD
Poor Gaara, Shukaku is acting up again. I'd hug him if he were real and if I wasn't sure he would kill me if I did! Maybe if Gaara started listening to the High School Musical Soundtrack or something, Sukaku might implode and shut up. At least Jarod is perceptive *cough*OCD*cough* enough to recognize and understand his moods. Tsk, tsk, Omi, you should know better than to toss out the "h" word around Naruto! Well, at least he managed to get one idiom right, too bad no one was recording it, hehehe. I am going to be nit-picky though and point out that since Raimundo is Brazilian, he would speak Portuguese, not Spanish. Common mistake, but I only know that cause my great-grandfather was born there. Hmm, wait, did I say this before? Ah well, it's no big deal actually, cause I can see that it works for the story so, meh. I'll not be a language Nazi!
Dear Lord, Fred Fredburger! Dun dun dun... He's just so annoying! He's like a big braindead toddler that won't go away. XD It's a good thing Mr. "Supreme Leader Guy" decided to run, otherwise Spike probably would have killed Fred. I want to eat some frozen yogurt, yes! Blargh...
Yeah, Bloo's not the most directionally adept blob thing...err, person, but at least they finally got to the house! That's so cool that the vortex took the entire house with it to Traverse Town. I always thought that the house itself might be an imaginary friend, like in the rumors Mac was talking about. Aww, dun worry, Mac! At least you've still got your hyperactive, yet loyal PacMan-esque sidekick. Although, Mac would be quite frightening if he were bald. O_o
WooHoo! The consciences finally have names! *dance of happy* Razael and Samael, based on the names of biblical God angels and fallen angels right? Raziel, "secret of God" one of the archangels...supposedly, he wrote The Book of the Angel Raziel, which was supposed to be given to Adam but was tossed into the sea by jealous angels. When it was found, it became the book of Enoch. For an angel though, he is pretty violent XD. I guess that comes from being a part of Zim's psyche though, haha. I just have to point out again how much that guitar-saw effing rocks :)"It's Chop Chop time!!" I think I died laughing. Admittedly, when I read that you decided to name him Razael, I couldn't help thinking "Raz the Spazz" ;) Now I have a reason to, thanks! XD Samael, the chief of Satans and the angel of death. He's charged with a crapload of stuff! According to one biblical source, he (in disguise as a snake) seduced Eve and became the father of Cain, the first human to commit murder by killing his brother, Abel. Oi vey. Good for Zim that this Samael is such a wimp. XD Go gettum Razzy! I wonder if he'd share that shoe wit me...kinda hungry I am...
Wow, Aang is a perpetually happy lil monk ain't he? What, Calvin? A spinning top of air doesn't convince you of Aang's elemental prestige? Pfft, no imagination. I'm just glad that the GAang is all right. Especially Katara in all of her bossiness, heh heh. Poor Aang, she's got it in for him. :)
Oh now you've done it Morte, insulting Zim's beret like that! *sigh* Zim and Calvin, when will you two learn that fighting each other is only gonna make Hobbes kick your butts?
At least Zim hasn't lost his ability to instigate murderous angry mobs! ...wait...
Yay! Room of Never-ending stairs! That's a painting by someone and I don't know who! I'd hate to be lost in there. But at least the room didn't blow up like I expected. And then of course, the infamous trapdoor what leads us to a lovely scene with KP, Ron, and Abel! How Ron got his monkey tail, I'm pretty sure I don't want to know, but It's a nice addition, bwahahahaha. Aww, Hobbes is enamored by Kimmy. How kyuute! And finally, someone other than Ron who understands Rufus. XD
Y'know, I really thought that the map was going to end up being possessed. By what I dunno, but that would have been funny, hehe he. Calvin chewing Kim's head...disturbing O.o Oh poor Abel; Cheer up emo priest! Fate picks on everyone you share that room with.
And then... Spike magically appears, dah duh dah dah dum deedum! *coughhackchoke* First order of business: give Abel a pouch of something suspiciously close to blood. Ew... Secondly: ** off everyone in the room greatly and then instigate a fight with Kim Possible by knocking her boyfriend's tail and then proceeding to have her kick your own ego in the ** by making a crack about your mum. Oh dear. Thirdly: morph to scary snarling vampire form and scare the crap outta the underage readers. XD Good thing it's Father Nightroad to the rescue! Wo...yeah.
Well anyway, the story wouldn't be the same if it didn't end with something bursting into flames! "Oh. He's on fire.Again." *snortgiggle* And just when we all thought they were safe- random wall explosion! Hmm, I wonder who that could be now?! Hhahaha.
Kay, that's that until the next chapter! Thanks for the awesomeness so far, and good luck with everything! ^_^ |
 BloodSkye 2007-08-10 . chapter 5OMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGABELABELABELABELABELABEL YAY! lol i luv Abel he's so cool and stuffs. He's always so cheery and stuffs and then he goes all Crusnik on people and its so creepy yet so cool and i luffs him. YAY NEW CHAPTER! I luffs it too. I'm hyper, i just had a lot of unbaked brownie batter stuffs. anyway, luffs the story, luffs the characters, luffs Abel, Ed and Al. Zim is cool too. I luffs him cuz he's all crazy and stuffs. Edo-kun and Aru-kun are so cool and stuffs. Zim's just uberly cool and he makes the awesomest Keyblader ever i think. I'm going to go reread the part with Spike and Zim's fight and stuffs. Kyuu ♥♥ |
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