   Kaprycorn Hunt 12/13/11 . chapter 1You forgot could you have forgot the Ax-man?He's Tobias's best friend!Anyway...i have three words for you dude-PUNCUATION AND SPACES!Other than that nice summary.
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| The Eons of Eternity 1/7/09 . chapter 1 puncuation please! |
| Ja-Kha'jay 4/5/03 . chapter 1 O Keep going! I like so far. |
| just a girl 1/2/03 . chapter 1 Hello it's me again!
Just wanted 2 say HELLO ) |
| just a girl 12/31/02 . chapter 1 well...
I just "tested" some storys and I review this cuz I just wanted to write something
I didn't even read da story!
but..
no..nothing!
Have a nice life)
And yeah
Happy new year everybody! |
| Jedi Takeru 9/19/02 . chapter 1 IT'S KIDA HARD TO READ A SOLID B;OCK OF TEXT WITHOUT EVEN INDENTING SO MY ADVICE IS INDENT AND PUT IN PARAGRAPH BREAKS! |
| BreannaBreifs 4/10/02 . chapter 1 Ooooooooh good...more? Soon? |
| Super Secret Mario 2/8/02 . chapter 1 Not very good, this should be joined with the sequel since all it does is introduce things. |
| Lomelindi 7/6/01 . chapter 1 Hmmm...good attitude. You summarize stuff pretty good. |
| MrSir 7/4/01 . chapter 1 I liked it... could've been longer and it did seem to sound familiar though...*coughanimorphscough*! |
| Foxfire 1/29/01 . chapter 1 Is that just the biggining or what? |
| poop1 1/10/01 . chapter 1 Umm...that was just telling us what we already knew...you could have skipped that whole thing... |
| Catia 10/10/00 . chapter 1 Okay good I guess, a little rushed and WHERE ARE THE PARAGRAPHS? |
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