I LOVE YOU! :)

this story is actually AMAZING!

i read it ages ago and have been trying to persuade my brother to read it ever since :) tis VERY funny :) i ACTUALLY laughed out loud multiple times whilst reading..!

anyway, you HAVE to write ReEldest! i NEED to read MORE! i feel like i'm addicted!! :P please?? :) soon?! :P :)

This story is so much fun! I wish the characters of Eragon would come visit me... But I would have no story to write for them...

"Don't you know it's violation?
It's so wrong, but you'll see
Never gonna let you take my world from me
The world outside these walls may know you're you're breathing
But you ain't coming in..."

ooh... sounds fascinating already

I like this idea. But, the plot is really in for it now, huh? And I wonder how the characters would have had it in the real story if they had their way... hmm. And, why would it have taken three whole months? Seriously, that is one GIGANTIC plothole.

*pokes* ReEldest, please? :D

Hm. I don't usually like stories in which the author appears, but this is so well written that I can't help but enjoy. Er, am I the only one still desperately clinging onto the increasingly feeble hope that Murtagh WILL survive, and turn out good too?!

Nice job taking out the barrier to Roran and Katrina's marriage. In most situations, if two young villagers love each other, and the guy has the means to support his wife, everyone's all for it, and nobody makes a scene.

I don't have the time to read through the whole thing, but good work!

I will say that you should have let the minor characters in. They have it even worse. Eragon, for example has his actions controlled by the plot, but the minor characters have their very being controlled by the plot. You're lettig Arya and Durza decide what they want to do, but you aren't letting the minor characters decide who they want to BE!

Since I only comment on something if I don't agree with it, that means if I only comment on a few things, you did a REALLY good job on the rest of it...like how Saphira should be able to travel early.

I know you already made the decision and wrote about it, but I hope you saved Garrow. He only died for the plot--to make Eragon angsty and decide to travel with Brom.

Speaking about Brom, same thing. You shouldn't kill him off!

If you're writing this for the characters, you should be as nice to all of them as you possibly can!

I REALLY like the idea behind this, and the first chapter was perfect! Secondly, I could never do something like this for fear of leaving something out or going about it the wrong way. That being said, here are some issues I found in your version:

If Durza wants a better description, why don't you give him one? You could just add a few extra sentences. This story should help all the characters, not just the ones you like.

You only let half the people in that scene give input! What about Faolin and Glenwing? I'm sure they'd rather not be killed.

I'm glad to see that someone else cares about what the characters think!

Great ending! Now I'm really, really eager to read ReEldest. Although I'm sad that Arya and Durza parted ways, they do make such a great team. And Brom is in the prison of Ellesmera? Oh, you're so evil!

This is great! I like how you fleshed the characters out more than they were in the books. ^.^ And for the sequel; May I make a request? King Orrin is excluded out of the books for so long... He's really a cool character, just very overlooked. Anyway, just wanted to say I enjoyed your story. ^.^

Autodoll

This was great. I'm really looking forward to the sequel. I can only imagine everything you'll put in it - plots, changed characters, new characters, suspence, romance, drama, everything! I will check my email every day until I see it there. This has been one of the best Eragon fanfics I have ever read.

Read you soon (hopefully),

Adi

Lovin' the denial...

Arya was just a bit too sissy/helpless in this... I can see where she would be startled, scared, maybe even freeze up a little, but the elves value self-control very highly. I think she probably would have been able to overcome her emotions and enter the fight earlier as well as heal him more easily. However, I like the fact that they both showed signs of weakness and emotion (Durza's almost losing but being determined to "go down fighting", Arya's being shocked at the Ra'zac's semi-humanity and being worried about Durza). It somehow makes them more human, even though neither of them is.

Liked the hair-stroking. Hair-stroking is good.

Best regards,

Adi

Oh now is over! I love this fic, and I'll be waiting for ReEldest! With more Brom, Durza (Durza/Arya, yay!!) and Murtagh!

I'll love Paollini read this fic!!