what a great chapter. it wasnt to dramatic which is always nice to see. I liked how you unsloved the mystery of who shot and glad its not Steve. I kind thought it was Tim though but was a little bit unsure with Steve sistution. Please write another new story soon.

Wow! Very well written! I felt like I was there, watching everything happen. Is this it? I'd like to see what happens to Tim, and how Steve copes with his own role in the whole affair.
Well done!

It was interesting to find out who the shooter is, but, to be honest with you, I'm not crazy about the way the third omniscent fits in with the rest of the story.

An interesting fleshing out of a character mention from the book. I enjoyed it, overall.

Oh my gosh.

First of all, I don't think this was a bad ending at all. It really concluded everything.

And I honestly never would have expected Tim to have been the one that shot her. It never even crossed my mind while reading this - but what a great twist! I mean, not great that she got shot and he shot her and ... well, you know what I mean.

But seriously, I never saw that coming. I thought it was some Soc that had shot her, for some reason.

Anyway, all in all I think you did a really great job with this, and I definitely enjoyed reading it. It really gave me new insight into " ... and one time a girl got shot." I think now, whenever I read that line, I'll probably always associate it with Maureen. :)

Peace. :)

it's not so much the ending as the way it was written...the style is good in the rest of the chapters, but this one is written poorly.

Timothy (insert middle name here) Shepard. I'm really very disappointed in him.

I like the style of this. Very narrative and flowy and ironic.

I was wondering, though, you had a paragraph that talks about Maureen getting in fights and covering the bruises with makeup... do you mean that Tim hit her? If not, you may want to clarify that. And if so, wow. That was never really something I could see him doing. Of course, I can't really see him shooting a girl and then hiding from it either, but that's the glory of these random characters in The Outsiders... everybody has a different perception.

Anyway, I'm surprised that was the end. It seemed a little abrupt, but that may be what you're going for. Her death was abrupt and there really isn't any way to tie things up.

So anyway. good job. I enjoyed this fic.

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Wow, I loved this...it brings the previous chapter into so much more of a pathetic (in a good way lol) light. I just end up feeling for Tim, having shot someone he actually liked, and not someone he actually would've shot if given a choice.

I like that I can look back and see all the hints that it was Tim that was responsible...because earlier on I read it like Tim knew who was and was covering for them and Maureen was okay with that. (Well...he kind of was doing that lol.)

Great job with this! I'm sad it's all over...BUT there's 'Long Time Running' to look forward to =)

I really liked this story. You had a few spelling mistakes, the kind spell check doesn't really pick up on. But other than that, it was great. I love how you give everone's seperate thoughts then as the story progresses you see how everyone links together. Is this the last chapter? I wasn't sure. The last line - "I think I'll remember the last time longer than the first time." - made my heart sink. You have a great writing way that makes people really feel for the characters. Okay, so enough of me rambling. :D

I like your story, + I love the diary of Anne Frank, sad book.

wow great story im glad i read it. I liked how you showed a diffrent side of Tim ... sorta.This was real orginal. Please keep writting you've got major talent.

Great chapter...I love the quiet conversational tone it has. Tim has some great lines in this. I like how the Dingo was where they ended up, it's a nice way to remind us that we still don't know what happened that night really.

I think I do like this one much better than the first version. As you said, it feels more appropriate in comparison to the other chapters. The style is better matched.

And I adore Tim's last line. Perfect.

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Aw, I really loved this chapter. I think it was one of my favorites.

I loved the interraction you had going between Tim and Jackie-lynn. It seemed very natural and friendly.

And I love the way you wrote Tim's character here, and the fact that Jackie-lynn seemed to overlook or not mind his tough exterior. I think the almighty Ted would be proud. Lol.

Awesome job, as usual! Looking forward to more.

Peace. :)

Bravo! I love what you're doing with this. I'm really enjoying the way you portray the characters, and there is clearly still a plot even after what happened to Maureen, which is refreshing. This means that there is more than one main character or protagonist, and that really gives depth to the story and makes it very interesting.
Anyway, please update soon and keep up the good work. Great job!

I like it quite a bit, actually. I do think, though, that Mrs. Klein probably should have been called way back when they decided that she didn't have long to live. Instead of Cherry running all over to find the brother, I would think she would go to Maureen's house and tell his family there.

And it also seems a little strange to me that Mrs. Klein warmed up to Steve and Soda so quick. That m ight just be me, though.

I love how you write TIm, and that line about him keeping his cool while everyone else is losing their minds... perfect.

I saw a few typos, but nothing huge.

I'm excited to read more.

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