Reviews for Break the Chain

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Bonnie 2007-08-31 ch 9, anon.	abuseDon't be sorry, you shouldn't have to work in that condition. I'm glad your cousin is ok, and I hope you are too. Thanks for the story.
The Fuzy Llama 2007-04-28 ch 9,	abuseah... don't be sorry. None of this is your fault. I don't think I'm in the position to put myself in your shoes, but it must be so terrible to lose all the writing you worked so hard on and to come so close to losing your cousin. ugh... it almost gives me shivers to think of how twisted and senselessly cruel humans can become, and how weak our defense systems really are. Bad combination. But don't feel like you have to apologize for not writing because having to rewrite chapters is the worst. I guess... my advice is write when you feel like, whatever you feel like writing-even if it's not fanfiction. It's probably naive of me, but I think if you just be yourself and follow your own rhythm then everything will work out on it's own. It's not like we're holding you to a deadline here... And -hopefully- you won't have to wait too long for Book 3 since they promised it in March... :)
Sumomo92 2007-04-28 ch 9,	abuseOMG!! I'm SO sorry! Try take things slow and somethings are hard to get past. I know because one time when my Unlce died I couldn't do much. V.V Get better and always hope for the best!! ^.~ That is the best remody for anything! Sorry for the help even though you might not need it lol.
Lady Elaine Firecat 2007-04-24 ch 9,	abuseThat's a shame about your computer... are you sure you won't continue this story? It's really good and I hate being left hanging.
heartsyhawk 2007-04-23 ch 9,	abuseWell, I'm sorry to hear about the hiatus, and the tech problems, but I guess it can't be helped. I'm glad to hear your cousin is ok. Take as much time as ya need to step out of the writing arena. I completely understand what that's like...given I've not updated in ...a really long time myself...
GQPotterFan 2007-04-11 ch 8,	abuseupdate update! I know you're a fantastic writer already because I read all 404,0 words of Secrets of Memories. But I only read complete stories and when I realized you're writing an Avatar one, I couldn't wait for you to finish. So update! =)
Jesse Lin 2007-03-13 ch 1,	abuseHello, it is me, the one you gave a fantastic review. I just wanted to applaud you on your fine writing. This story is entertaining and reasonable. You have an excellent flare for writing (You misspelled grammar in the beginning, though. Thought that would be good to know). Your drabbles leave something to be desired, however. Keep it up. I'd read more but I don't want your ideas leaking into my stories, since they are in same time period. Sorry for the long review Respectfully Yours- JL
Kishi 2007-03-06 ch 8,	abuseAfter all these claims of length of chapter, I decided to test this thing. 23 pages. Hmm. Not bad. But moving on to the story itself. Well, it was obvious that Long Feng wasn't going to take to Azula all that great. Good to see that he's still got the heart to scheme. Y'know, for the record, I saw the jumping-to-conclusions-from-signs-of-a-wanted-poster thing coming. Dao's being an ally is a bit of a surprise at this point, but I dunno if I trust him or not. Aww, no wonder you didn't have so many reviews! You had a Jinko moment! Ha! Poor Zuko doesn't know why he did it, but dangitall I swear I can see this happening. Sadly, I can also see Jin getting busted by the Dai Li too. Meanwhile, Zuko's ninja-ing his way along the rooftops, thinking of the past and worrying about the guards. But at least they don't catch the shadow leaping across the wall. So, you're pulling the whole 'new hairdoes' thing like what the creators are doing. Very nice. I think Sokka's a little out of character in this section, though. He never seems to mind hoofing it places, especially seeing as he chose to do it in the first place, during 'Jet.' I dunno. Just an observation. Ha ha. And Zuko's plan works. And seems to be working very well. He even got the three. Oh yes. Satisfaction at last. And Iroh doesn't forgive at the drop of a hat either, good move. And Zuko's got another plan. Nice. And Xuan Ji's been captured! Oh noes! But how in the world is he going to remember anything that's going on? Wasn't he as drugged as everyone else? Hm. And so I've caught up at last. Cool. Can't wait for the next one!
Kishi 2007-03-05 ch 7,	abuseOkay, so Wu's in on this. Nice. But Azula's playing a little weird. She goes to all this trouble to show how caring she is for her brother, but she wants to keep everyone in the dark about what it is? Though maybe that suits her. She is now heir-apparent, and she'll use that power. Cabbage Man! Yes! And Jin! Yatta! Chase scene was handled pretty well too. Too bad Aunt Wu has to get the... eh, full tour of facilities. Zuko and Jin, meanwhile, got problems enough of their own. And the reaction Zuko has is priceless. I want to believe that Jin would want to help him out. Who knows? Maybe she would, maybe she wouldn't. But the way she sounds here... I mean, she sounds like she would. Anyway, I'm almost caught up. Wow. Interesting. Wonder what that'll feel like.
Kishi 2007-03-04 ch 6,	abuseSo this chapter opens up with the invasion of the south. Katara's perspective really brings out the chaos of the situation. The dehumanizing of the soldiers is another nice touch, making them monsters instead. And we finally get to see Iroh again. Poor man's not doing so hot, but at least he's still alive. Heck of a twist, though, having Lu Ten kill Katara's mother. But that's the sort of twist the creators would pull. And is that Jet I hear rumor of? Only one stupid boy I know on this whole show. ^^;; So Zuko makes it down and decides that now he's gonna fix this whole mess. Great. Let's see how this path goes.
Kishi 2007-03-02 ch 5,	abuseWow, poor Aang. He doesn't catch a break, does he? If he isn't catching it in the mortal world, he's catching it in the immortal one. Still, much as I hate to say it, Roku has a point. Aang's selfishness cost him pretty bad on this one. Even if it was to save his friends, he has to balance the world as well. A sucky choice, but he doesn't have much to work with here. And finally! Finally, Zuko wakes the heck up and starts to understand the answer to his question. I wonder what it is? Nice trick, by the way, using the transcribed dialogue like that. Iroh seems to be good and mad about what's going on. And he should be. It's got Azula blinking and backing down, even. Heh heh. All right. Aang, it seems, has decided to take Roku's lecture to heart. He's trying to focus and do the right thing. I don't imagine Sokka's gonna take too kindly to all of that... for that matter, I'm pretty sure Aang's going to have some friction with all of them eventually. Which'll be pretty friggin' sweet. At least Katara's awake now. More later...
Kishi 2007-03-01 ch 4,	abuseAll right, chapter four. And here we go... So that's how this isolated village has points on everything. They've got an inside man. Which is totally logical and makes sense and everything. Yeah. I also think it's interesting that you're using Zuko's earlier illness as a plot device now. It wasn't impossible, but it's impressive nonetheless. And it looks like Kuei's going to man-up finally, hm? 'bout time. Good to see that people are still loyal enough, at least to the idea of him. It's just crazy enough to work! Azula's as evil as ever, very nice. Hm. Guess that's it for my commentary. You have a few grammatical slips in here, nothing unforgivable. It's all good.
Kishi 2007-02-28 ch 3,	abuseOkay. Somehow, you're rubbing off on me. I have this sudden urge to go back and start re-writing my stuff. It's probably based on how good your work is; mine is nothing to be impressed with. So, longer chapter. That's cool. And the Katara-falling-sick scenario works this time because Zuko isn't going to find her. So automatic originality. Still not sure how you read the creator's minds, but somehow this is just what the characters sound like in the show. I'm really diggin' this. And I can't wait to hear why Katara's fallen sick or what the heck's going on with everybody just dropping like this. It's gonna be great. I'm looking forward to it!
Kishi 2007-02-27 ch 2,	abuseFor the record, I'd like to point out that only psycho-fangirls love Zuko. It's a rule. Didn't you get the memo? Bwahahaha. ... Erm yeah. So, chapter the second. I don't care how anal retentive you are, I honestly like the characterizations. Everything sounds as something that they'd say. Azula's orders - and Zuko's playing into them to make things harder for Iroh - are just heartless and cruel and utterly compelling. And Azula has plans... but she always has plans. I wonder what this next one will be.
Kishi 2007-02-26 ch 1,	abuseAll right, so this is the hypothetical 3rd book you've been talking about. So. Let's see. Gotta say, I'm impressed. Everybody's feeling lost and confused, and poor Aang. He's just lost. Probably trying to get back through the Spirit World right now. Hence the comics, heh. But, moving on, I'm particularly impressed by all the little touches. These characters all sound like themselves, and Momo and Appa are actual players in the scene. Do you know how often authors overlook them? Do you know how often I overlook them? Well-done.

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