Hm... this was actually quite an interesting little fanfiction, I must say. There are only two things with which I was a little dissatisified, and that is rare for me considering that I usually have a long list of criticisms, not all of which I put in writing, of course...

a) while the first few scene transitions flowed seamlessly, the last two jarred a little, though I'm not quite sure why. Was this purposeful or accidental?

b) in the final scene, featuring Vincent and Shelke, the latter was a litte OOC.

Aside from these minor flaws, it was a skilfully crafted and engaging story. Would like to read more from you in the future!

Heh... nice.

I remember reading this when you first wrote it... on my computer, mind you. Either way, well written and good introspection. I likee.

Luff joo, sis,

Bijin

Saw your story, and thought you could use a review!

Personally, I haven't actually played DoC, but I do have a vague idea what happens to Vincent and all that wonderful stuff.

You are quite the writer, your style of writing is very emotional and dialogue based instead of centering around visual details. You seem to have a knack for implying the visual through a short reference and dialogue without needing to descirbe it physically.

Well done!