I really love this story! It is amazing. Though, I do agree you have a few grammatical errors, but those are nothing a beta couldn't fix! If you'd like, you can check out my page, I'm currently available to beta stories, and I would LOVE to beta yours. Excellent plot, character development, and everything!

How dare you defy me! How dare you betray me like this and go against my plans of world domination! HOW DARE YOU!?!?!?!?

I'm going to train my bunnies to destroy your cookies... then I shall eat the remains that no one else will want because my evil bunnies have touched them. Yes, perfect!

And sorry dear, you're not evil. You're still just cute. Very, very cute.

Now then, allow me to utterly disregard the fact the fact that I'm supposed to be commenting on the chapter by leaving. Bunny training here I come!

Moony

I Love your story. And I don't mind waiting for the next chapter if it stays this good. Your English isn't bad at all. Trust me, I've seen far far worse on fanfiction. Strangely enough, most do not accept anonymous reviews. But if you really want somebody to beta. I would love to do it. My email is amydebeij @ hotmail. com. Don't forget to remove the spacers. Please keep writing and I really look forward to the next chapter. Amy

Oh! i know what's gonna happen! First-

°gets knocked on head by random desk°

... Why do I have a feeling the authoress doesn't want me spoiling things... wonder how she got that desk though...I really need to check into that.

Fine, i won't spoil the plot then. And I'll even nag to you about your spelling and grammer over MSN tomorrow or something... which is basically because I'm too lazy to type it down but we're gonna pretend that it's because I'm a nice person and I don't wanna point everything out where people are reading.

Even though barely anyone reads reviews.

There, not just a review with update soon. i will throw that desk back at you if you take much longer than a month to update though. I'll keep it safe until then ^^ I'll put it in my purse next to my walk-in closet.

UPDATE SOON!

Moony

Wow...I'm seriously gonna have to read this story ovr because I only vaguely remember what it's about and am not remembering any details. I hope you're feeling better though, we all go through those rough patches. I still haven't updated this story I wrote from years ago r_r; Just take your time and see what happens. Happy Belated New Year =)

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

Hehehe Trunks is very naughty in this one. I'm glad that the introductions have been made, and I can't wait to see if Pan's going to succede with her mission...I guess. Anyways another wonderful chapter. I'm going to read more soon. Keep up the excellent work. Laters

Hehehe me complain never. If anyone should complain than it should be you. I've been a bad reader/reviewer. Look how long it's taken me to read this gem. Ladybugg hangs her head in shame as I suddenly get a knock upside the head with a rolled up newspaper. Anyway I loved this chapter and I will finish reading this entire story as soon as I can. Besides you already know that I love your stories, I've just been a lazy wanker that's been sitting around all day working and eating cookies. Hm I wonder whose fault is that?? Great second chapter. I love the originality of this. Keep up the great work. Laters.

nice chapter like it alot!

Tsk, now I'm geting history from stories?!?!?!?! I mean, I thought it was the summer holidays! NO SCHOOL! And what does Lurah-chan do, she gives me a history lesson. °shaes head° evil as ever.

Anyway, since I'm done yelling at you now, and not counting the history lesson I just got, nice chapter, though a bit short. Short chapter calls for short review °nods° besides, I have another mail and I need a shower before 10, so suck it up.

Update soon and all that which you don't even listen to so I don't even exactly know why I'm boethering to type it down but yeah, and cya later.

Moony

What a great chapter
Hope you update soon

wow this story is better then i thought it ever could be i started to read it and was at chapter 3 and had to wait a long time for the rest and now i will sit on pins and needils waitting for the next chapter i so wasnt to know if she will save trunks and go to Vevina together or will she live life on earth and go to hell it could go bothways and still be a good story so i hope that is wont be a decade of waitting for the next chapter ( i will give you chocolate) please update soon

I really enjoyed this story and I can't wait to read more of it. Pan was not the same as in my story Wild West where... well never mind if you want to know you ahould read the story but ethier way the story was excellent and I can't wait for the next.

oo. sounds like she shook hands with a demon. update, uh...this year?

NICE CHAPTER PLEASE UPDATE SOON. MAKE SURE THAT YOU STAY OF THE CHOCOLATE FOR A WHILE OKAY. LOL!