Interesting. You're a good poetess. Excellent work. (Tailkinker)

*sniff* That was so beautiful...

*sniff* Tres bien. A good summary of their last moments.

Wow. I thought I'd seen everything there was to see about Obi-Wan's reaction to Qui-Gon's death, but you proved me wrong! Beautiful. Keep writing, and may the Force be with you!

Nice! You capture Qui and Obi Wan well. I don't know much about poetic form (ryme and meter) myself so I don't know if you got that right and the last line is a little cliche, but otherwise really good job.