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Nonsumpisces 2008-07-12 ch 11, anon.	abuseI know this fic has been finished for over a year but I had to review and tell you that I thought this was very well thought out and perfectly executed in regards to the plot, pacing, character development, flashbacks, and the romantic bit there at the ending. The things Vincent had to face about himself in order to move on the next "level" ultimately made him let go of the past and learn to be happy in the present. The fact that if he hadn't he probably would have never been happy much less be with Yuffie was a point I really liked. You should try writing original short horror stories. You have a definite talent for them.
CarrionRaven 2008-07-09 ch 2,	abuseI've read this story before, but I don't think I reviewed it. This is one of my favorite stories on this website. It's so very powerful, and I loved every chapter.
Sienna03 2008-06-01 ch 11,	abuseHey PAS, saw this one won the complete chapter category over at Genesis and I see why. This was absolutely beautifully done: the prose was right on and the concept a lot more creative than what I'm guessing most people are used to seeing. Vincent and Yuffie are adorably in-character and I love the idea of Vincent going literally and figuratively through Hell for anything. Wonderfully done.
YesAnimeCharactersCanBeSexy 2008-05-27 ch 11,	abuseOh my gawd, loved it, especially the ending with the tie-in to the first chapter. And you come up with some of the greatest one-liners ever. Seriously. xD Also, ~thank you~ for not glazing over the fact Vincent was a Turk and a damn good one - which meant he did some terrible things. I love how you wrote Yuffie - captured both her randomness and her depth very well. Anyways, wonderful story, my eyes are hurting from staring at the monitor for so long (I have a bad habit of not blinking when I'm reading enthralling fics). Definitely deserved the Genesis Award - big congrats to you for winning that! :)
Neophyte Ronin 2008-01-22 ch 11,	abuseLike I said: horror fiction. Not all horror movies end in death and utter defeat. We do not read horror fiction because we're sadistic blood-mongers, either. The secret to horror fiction is that it is subgenre to adventure--exploration--meaning it has a firmer grasp on the tolerance of one's psyche than what most other genres can attest to. Erotic fiction can also be described in this fashion: a journey of self-discovery. Vincent underwent untold bounds to transcend his lot as a merciless being underhanded continuously by pestilent demons, only for the sake of someone he loves. It was a journey of self-discovery that he actually won, even though the bowels of hell treated him to some horrible visions of sadism and cruelty. This is something I'd put under the supernatural romance categories, or under the horror designation, because quite literally, this is a piece of horror fiction and should not be designated as "General". Then again, people feel safer at the beginning of a journey when they click on "General", which is probably why you chose that label in the first place: you sugar-coated your true approach with a euphemism that would suck the audience in. Perhaps that's because the taste of blood is sickeningly sweet and thick anyway. This is perhaps one of the only Yuffie/Vincent fics to receive my proper validation as a plausible means of happening: a crisis must happen wherein Vincent sacrifices something important in order to save his beloved. That's what made me love Vagrant Story so much: Ashley has to confront his inner demons to realize Sydney's words as true... at least to some extent... when in fact, the inner demons consisted purely of his own guilt and assumptions of inadequacy, even though his stature and grace under pressure overwhelmed practically every adversity throughout that dungeon. There were moments in your fiction where Vincent's mind plays evil tricks which practically mirror what happens to Ashley Riot. He starts envisioning some pretty grossed-out shit, the worst of which is shooting Yuffie in the head and being done with that fight. But if he didn't cry, unlike all those other times when he barely lifted a finger about the work he performed... then he would never have been able to forsake his immortality and rare, cruel gifts like he did. And everything was achieved with few author's notes and tons of passion. This is horror fiction, pure and simple, and damned if you don't get a whole tray's worth of baked goods for your troubles. Fuck, I'll learn how to bake a proper batch if that makes you feel better. Just say the word. Consider writing horror fiction because you have the same kind of sap that makes Stephen King's work so popular: his stuff also has good endings. If they didn't end happy (like yours), then everyone would continue their long-held misguided perception that horror stories are all about blood and guts and sadistically laughing over the demise of innocent victims when turned against unimaginable, intolerable revelations and excesses of fantasy and reality. It is about intelligently overcoming such odds... or dying honorably in the attempt.
Neophyte Ronin 2008-01-22 ch 9,	abuseBy now, it's obvious: this is supernatural horror. It's a world of difference when you just label a fiction as general or miscellaneous, because this has all the trappings of a gothic horror story. It has to, considering your choice in protagonist. I only point this out because you probably would never see as much publicity if you have, for instance, labelled this as an actual horror/romance or romance/horror. Nobody wants to touch horror at period. It's such a niche, and a subgenre of adventure. But the horror aspects made this compelling. In fact, I dreaded reading this because I figured I would see another romance. But it turns out this sucker is more horror-oriented than it is romantic. I suppose I had to grow up a little bit and stop assuming the fanatics into Yuffie and Vincent pairings had no sense at all. I also had to grow up in general. Back in my senior year in high school, I dreaded the fact that I had to read Emily Bronte's sole classic, her only classic, and perhaps a startlingly good book as long as you're not forced into reading it: "Wuthering Heights." There were many people who slavishly bought into the notion that it was a tale about unrequitted love. Not exactly true; much if not all of the conflict in Wuthering Heights centered upon the evils of Catharine's suitor Heathcliffe, who invariably became utterly venomous and vengeful over not being able to be with his soulmate. He was something of a caged animal himself, like Vincent in many respects. At the time, I was bored with the text and actually remarked to my teacher--total sweetheart who broke every other kids' heart by getting married--about the fact that I was so glad that the author died around a year after her book got published. The supernatural degree of passion in that book was lost on me. Maybe I also refused to accept parallels between the character and I around the time; I had my own unrequitted love story which made the third part of a novel--My Antonia--read during my previous year in high school, far more enjoyable. It seemed like the passages therein were feasible to me, like I could just grasp the sweet blonde bombshell who resembled Lena Lingard in many respects. However, that love became unrequitted, making my trudging through Wuthering Heights much more difficult. I hated playing the villain. And when I started reading this just yesterday--deadlines, deadlines, deadlines!--I became as entranced into these passages as I had been with My Disjointed Life. It is Inferno-meets-Time Machine, an impressionistic style of wonder and shock that also delivers on Vincent's basic premise. Vincent is named after Vincent Price, who often performed narration for myriad Hollywood B-Movies with cult appeal, particularly monster movies. Vincent's transformations into creatures, frankenstein, and masked chainsaw maniacs, finally ending with the sleek, evil-drenched Chaos, ride upon the inspiration from those movies. Much of Final Fantasy VII is gothic in style: grotesque happenings inside ruined or corrupted settings. Much of the Midgar slums is nothing but a disaster zone. And your impressionistic style, lengthy prose aside, captures this marvellous premise and lives up to the reasons behind making Vincent also appear as Johnny Depp--typecasted into oddball roles anyway--who performed Edward Scissorhands beside Vincent Price (Edward's creator and father), which was also his last screen performance before death. What I'm trying to say is: putting "General" up as the genre definition was a nasty way of pulling readers into horror fiction and literature. You should be proud of the banner and just put it up right next to "romance". There's certainly no complaint once people come out of their shell and read the wonder as it takes shape. Post-Script: I got dragged into this story because of current events in my life, revolving predominantly around injustice and forced solitude (until further notice). I identify with Vincent more and more because of that. Your story communicates a great deal to me. Just be aware that Tifa is terribly reserved with her temper, even in matters of death. Still, you managed to pull everyone into this story repeatedly. That's difficult to do. Be proud of that.
With A Smile 2008-01-06 ch 11,	abuseOh... squeals I love me a good Yuffentine story, and man oh man this one was brilliant! You wrote Vincent and Yuffie so in character, and your description of hell was perfectly... er... hellish :P The concept of this story is wonderful and the way you wrote the path to fetching a soul back from the dead was very ingenius and very very witty. Hoorah for a great story! Keep up the fantastic work ^^
Antifishestablishmentariani... 2008-01-01 ch 11,	abuseThis has got to be one of the most /amazing/ Yuffintine fics I have ever read! I loved the way that you weaved the story together so insightfully, blending illusions and memories together like that. The trials and trouble that Vincent goes through... wow. So descriptive and... wow! Much better than most 'back from the dead' stories. ^^ Loved it! Definitely one for the favorites list! ~ Ty
Kittencharmer 2007-12-18 ch 11,	abuseThanks so much for this...just riveting. I've been sick in bed with the flu and your story made it bearable! Words fail me right now, but the best I can come up with is "stunning"...
hono ookami 2007-12-13 ch 11,	abuseOh my God! You are an amazing writer. Your story had that edge in it that gives it such depth. I almost cried right at the first chapter when Yuffie died. And, plus, the ending was so sweet. A great ending for Vincent and Yuffie!
VulcanElf 2007-10-08 ch 11,	abuseThis story? Made of awesome.
X 2007-10-07 ch 1, anon.	abuseThe question, now that i think about it, is "Couldn't he bring Aerith back to life too?"
Wulfeh 2007-10-07 ch 11,	abuseA friend and I have been reading since around 1AM... it is NOW 3:15! Damn! You are fricking good! Send that to Nomura! WHOO! That was AMAZING! You. Fricking. Rock.
Wulfeh 2007-10-06 ch 2,	abuse...This...is AWESOME! I mean... it's like... Orpheus! And...Euridice! Is that where you got the idea? Wha'ever! This is fricking sweet! ...Vincent's not gonna screw up...is he?? He'd BETTER NOT!
LSR-7 2007-09-02 ch 11,	abuseThat was a very happy ending, but after all the pain I wish there was more, or a sequel that is just them and fluff :-P Great job.

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